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The Heart Can Hurt
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The Heart Can Hurt |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Heart can Hurt It started out so sweet with the soft breath of dawn creeping creeping through the a tiny pin prick of a hole in the shade. I could hear that Monday morning trash truck gear up pull back and the sound didn’t hurt my waking it had comfortable familiarity in its crusted noble task then the curtain parted fear opened and poured on me and I thought of all the dear touches and the words like songs a heart can really hurt tapping its fingers it can hurt in the waiting for news that ticks can you hear it tick the minutes how many beats per minute can it tick before the heart bursts and the clock explodes into pieces of memory floating down around the white bed and the white coat and the tubes and machines and the cadence of beeping instruments so I waited for an end of something that was still in progress still a work of art in outline drenched and pale with not yet and the day did tick on and there was no explosion and the sun set in a big orange ball behind a palm tree and I took a breath and another and another another |
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Nikolette Sadness
since 2000-07-29
Posts 337port richey fl. |
i liekd this one...very homey...i dunno why though....just relaxing i guess Nik i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ A sad little piece of your heart on this day of consternation and caring. 'then the curtain parted fear opened and poured on me and I thought of all the dear touches and the words like songs a heart can really hurt tapping its fingers it can hurt in the waiting for news' You express it well, my dear. Love you and thinking of you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Excellently expressed... with nice imagery... regards to you Martie, Sudhir |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
so I waited for an end of something that was still in progress still a work of art in outline drenched and pale with not yet and the day did tick on and there was no explosion and the sun set in a big orange ball behind a palm tree and I took a breath and another and another another Oh Martie---The ending of this is soooo perfect. Your imagery throughout is so vivid but the ending kills me....wonderful piece here......  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Martie..... then the curtain parted fear opened and poured on me and I thought of all the dear touches and the words like songs a heart can really hurt tapping its fingers it can hurt in the waiting for news that ticks can you hear it tick the minutes how many beats per minute can it tick before the heart bursts and the clock explodes into pieces EXCELLENT!! as always Enjoyed this immensely |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Nik--thanks so much for taking the time to read and respond to this poem. Marge--thanks for understanding and being there, my sis. Sudhir--thanks for your sweet reply. Mark--if I killed you with my ending I hope it's not terminal...thanks dear one. Dark Angel--thanks for the excellent, I'm glad you enjoyed. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Wonderful work, Martie. Our prayers are with you and Taylor. Elizabeth Why ME??? |
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Michael G Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579Nashville |
I loved the imagery in this Martie, I loved the way you expressed the anticipation so very well........ |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
You do tell a good story in your poetry Martie! THanks for the read "Life is like music; it must be composed by ear, feeling, and instinct, not by rule."~ Samuel Butler ~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
martie, i got you e-mail..i am having computer problems, just wanted to tell you my thoughts and prayers are with you and Taylor...keep me updated... this poem is of your usual grace... I know it helps to write about our fears. take care, both of you love ya sweet poet jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
The anticipation felt through this, leaves me counting my heart beat as well ... I've known this feeling also Martie. Beautifully written ... take care. Best wishes, /Kit |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
WOW Martie excellent piece. "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Those waiting moments can be maddening. I'm glad the outcome was good. Wonderful poem, Martie. Denise |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Adding to the library again, missed this one, somehow! |
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