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Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

0 posted 2000-02-24 07:02 PM

This Minutes Captured View

Just
a piece
   of sunshine
slanted in
this door of glass
to warm the teal carpet
with streaks of window pane
and patterned leaf shadows
that danced in teasing movement

Puppy chase phantom foliage
in vaulted joyful game
before a cloud killed her prey
the sway for tiny dog
to drowned in all that light
and lay full out with body splayed
mild and devoid of scamper
and smiling slide her eyes
beneath her paw and droop of ear

Then from the feeder
with wings accelerated
a mid air knight
with trusty spear
frenzy     fortified
      while
Just
a piece
   of sunshine
slanted in
this door of glass
to warm the teal carpet
and its Precious sun-drenched warrior

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In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 02-25-2000).]

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

1 posted 2000-02-24 08:03 PM

Martie, you take the simplest scene and turn it into a beautiful descriptive passage and a picture that all of us who have had a puppy recognize. You have magical words , Martie
Love
Liz

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

2 posted 2000-02-24 10:56 PM

This is adorable, Martie!

Denise

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

3 posted 2000-02-25 06:59 AM

I love they way your poems paint a picture vivid enough for me to see in my minds eye

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2000-02-25 07:41 AM

Martie~
What delightful puppy play.
Adorable.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Mike
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since 1999-06-19

Posts 2462

5 posted 2000-02-25 08:31 AM

Enjoyed very much. Indeed you do have an amazing ability to bring a simple instant in time to life and bring out its wonder.

whiskey

Senior Member

since 1999-12-28

Posts 1278
Australia

6 posted 2000-02-25 09:16 AM

Marti,
I enjoyed this alot, such wonderful discription and imagery lovely poem

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2000-02-25 09:22 AM

You invite us into your world so graciously, I almost expect to turn and find a cup of tea waiting. *S* Well done, Martie!

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

8 posted 2000-02-25 10:23 AM

Liz--Thank you for being such a magical friend.

Denise--this puppy is adorable.

Ruth--Your minds eye sees a lot

Marge--Yes, delightful!

Mike--I wonder if you would like a puppy? Just kidding. Thanks

Whiskey--thank you so much

suthern--You can come over for a cup of tea any time.

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
Senior Member

since 1999-08-26

Posts 997
northern mountains, Idaho

9 posted 2000-02-25 03:12 PM

You have such a delightfully meticulous way with your words! Painting lovely pictures again! I surely enjoy your work!

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

10 posted 2000-02-25 03:55 PM

Rosemary--Wow, delightfully meticulous--no one ever said that before. Is that good? LOL
I'm glad you enjoyed!

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