Divorcing A Friend (Revised repost from open 1)

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Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20

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Somewhere near the Rainbow

0 posted 2000-02-23 06:13 PM

Divorcing A Friend

Twisted words among cherished friends
we trust
endlessly leaping forward creating
dire mistrust.
Forever treasure this a laughing fool
I was once
never again freely willing to act
as your dunce.
You carelessly washed the walls
with my torn soul
and hopelessly left me sleeping
in a gaping hole.
Curving blind corners drive
your selfish ambitions
leaving you blissfully lost creating
nasty dispositions.

I failed to color in the bold lines
you traced for me
so now my volcanic anger is all
that erupts to see.
I saw in you a beautiful portrait
of a valued friend
yet no longer can my army of feelings
continue to defend.
I traveled through your venomous
destructive journey
thankful now that divorcing a friend
requires no attorney.

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2000-02-23 07:46 PM

Divorcing a friend--a painful and distasteful
process, but often necessary. Let it go awhile, you may yet meet again to go on in a
new direction. Well said.

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

2 posted 2000-02-23 07:49 PM

I found this a very interesting way to express finding out a friend wasnt who or thought you thought they were...Divorcing a friend...I like the way you expressed that in this poem. Very nice!

Amy

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Nurse Crachet
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since 1999-09-27

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3 posted 2000-02-23 09:57 PM

serenity: Thanks for reading, glad you enjoyed.

aimster: Thanks for reading and enjoying.

WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois

4 posted 2000-02-23 11:27 PM

I can really feel the hurt in this one. Maybe because I've been there myself. I've "divorced" a couple of them in my life. But when they're like that, who need em.

Well done Gloria, I love the way you used those words!

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There's only two ways you can go...
One way you can save your riches,
And the other will save your soul.
Rich Mullins

Sara
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since 2000-02-24

Posts 27
LaCrosse WI, United States

5 posted 2000-02-24 01:27 AM

This poem really affects me right now. I'm right now in the process of "divorcing" a friend and it's so hard. But this poem will prove to be comforting I think.

Michael

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since 1999-08-13

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California

6 posted 2000-02-24 01:35 AM

"I failed to color in the bold lines
you traced for me
so now my volcanic anger is all
that erupts to see."

I can't tell you how hard this phrase hit me. I know this feeling all to well. You don't need that shame cast upon you, Gloria, don't accept it. I know this was written long ago but I speak from experience when I say even if you kept in the lines, they would have changed the picture on you half way through.

Emotion carried beautifully throughout. Strong piece.

Michael

Denise

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7 posted 2000-02-24 10:45 PM

Excellent writing, Gloria! I agree with Michael, too. People like that just keep changing the rules to suit themselves. You are much better off without someone like that!

Denise

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

8 posted 2000-02-24 10:51 PM

Very strong wording. I also like the phrase Michael pointed out about coloring in the bold lines.Interesting poem
Liz

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