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It is Made of Tears
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It is Made of Tears |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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It is Made of Tears A house of stone, wood, ivy and wood shingles, with enormous porch filled with potted plants and wicker. The camellia bushes press, fuchsia line the steps, a walnut tree hides the sun. Down a weed-sprinkled path is the old hen house where no hen remains, only spiders, weeds and vines invade the doors and windows. Measure the room with footprints in the dust, a child’s bare feet. It measures ten footprints in every direction. Down a long hall is a room with the closet smell of mothballs absorbed by kimono high heels, and hat. The bed against the wall swallows in softness. Above the dresser naked cherubs cavort around a mirror in plump innocence. The sound of crow’s laughter comes from the pine across the street before the door opens to the smell of Listerine. Blue blanket made of satin. In the center a yellow felt bunny, tattered and frayed as if rubbed many times. Painful to hold now, its comfort gone for years. It is really made of tears. A glimpse of some sort of sadness covered now and stuffed with the comfort of satin. Inhale the essence of soft barbed wire and unlock the door to healing. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 02-22-2000).] |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
The imagery here is outstanding, I was walking through it all with you. Good work! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Wow! An excellent piece of writing, Martie, full of images and scents and touch, I feel as though I'm there witnessing, and smelling and feeling the emotions of this poem You are wonderful liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, wonderful paint, wonderful writing, woderful poem. *L* Sy |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Becky, Liz and Sy, thank you for reading and for your sweet replies. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Without a doubt, you make me see and be. I hug you with my heart, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
The sense of loss is apparent in this piece. One can only hope that it was softened by this writing .Embrace what gives you joy , and find comfort in your strengths. Doc |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marge, thank you as always for you lovingness. Dr Moose, this poem is not about loss but about healing. This was a memory from my childhood, some of which hurt. The meaning is about looking at pain in order to heal the hurt and move on. Thank you for your comments. |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Beautiful, with wonderful imagery Martie. I did indeed feel the twinge of sadness, but the overall feeling of hope and healing. *Krista Knutson* "Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Such work you've done here with this piece, Martie. Not only are the images so well placed and tactile references so easily felt, but it seems that you are able to, by the poem's end, soften the barbed wire, even if only a tiny bit. Each step forward is as much a victory as the last. Writing to be proud of, Martie. "Inhale the essence of soft barbed wire and unlock the door to healing." Claire |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
I love imagery like this, and I admire those who can do it well. Well done, Martie! Corinne |
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January Flowers Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 209South Carolina |
Martie~ This poetic ability of yours is completely astounding! You suck the readers right in and have us "feeling" every word with such emotion. Great Poem! |
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