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Echoes In The Darkness |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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Conditioned dreams Spew hated screams ~Which echo in the night~ Demented themes Enchanted beams ~Which hover in my sight~ It tastes of my fear So eager to pull Me under and sear The depths of my soul Imperiled rest Contorted jest ~I ache to ease this pain~ Unwanted guest A newfound quest ~To stop that thrice-cursed train!~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Man, you have been on quite a roll of late. You've done some wonderful writing while I was away and in the short time I've been back. This is no exception. If you fulfill that quest let me know...I'm feeling tied to the tracks right about now...LOL Michael |
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Alias Junior Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 30 |
Great Poem Chris. they awake me in the night and they offer me no rest- no matter how i scream or sweat, they remain, teasing with every haunting image. Dreams are dangerous things, but they can also say a lot... dont ignore them. Alias. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Christopher- WOW ! You are indeed, on-a-roll. Creativity slumbers, awakening within the arms of the muses of the night. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Excellent poem Christopher. I really enjoy the rhyming scheme you used, it flowed wonderfully. Keep on the roll, I want to read more of this stuff  I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Looks like that dry spell is over huh? Fantastic Chris! <*\\\>< When you can't make up your mind Which way is right for you, Stop and softly ask yourself, What Would Jesus Do? |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow...I really enjoyed the rhyme scheme you used with this one...really made the poem stand out and cry for attention |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Hmm -- thought you'd sneak this one by me, did you..?  Loved the rhyme scheme, the surprise at the end was priceless, but if I were you, I'd lose the pink.  --Me Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
It's definitely nice to see you posting - and some really good work... Keep writing, Grasshopper....  |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You are going to get such a bit head if one more person here tells you how incredibly good this poem is....ok...let it get big now! This is an incredible poem! I love it.. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Christopher, I enjoyed this too. I wasn't expecting the train to be your unwanted guest though. Neat ending, well executed, entertaining! Claire |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Michael - Does that mean you need some cowboy in a white hat to come to your rescue???  Alias - Alas that I could remember my dreams. The only one's I remember are the one's I have while awake! Thank you for the suggestion though! Marge - On-a-roll, or on-a-track??? Mistikman - Hey! Thanks! You've given me an excuse to bring back one of my favorites! I'll repost it here in OP #6, or you can follow this link: When Stars Collide Becca - We'll see... Ruth - Thank you for giving it some!!! Kess - Sorrrrrryyyy!!! LOL, and the pink stays!!! Nan - "Grasshopper???" Hmmm, now why that??? Sharon - You KNOW my head's not likely to get any bigger... Claire - Glad I could surprise you, t'was my intent. Actually, I'm surprise some people took the "train" as a dark symbolism...LOL, I meant it to be funny!!!  [This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 02-10-2000).] |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Not a cowboy, Chris, I think nothing but some good old fashion girl from Arkansas is gonna help me here. Haven't seen one around have you? Michael |
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Oscar Wilde Junior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 31San Francisco |
You write with such passion! Your biggest fan, O. |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
WOW I have been reading threw your poems...you are so talented..your definatley blessed with a gift! Thanks for sharing it! |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
We are the ones blessed with HIS gift..thanks Chris. |
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