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Angel
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0 posted 2000-02-21 12:36 PM


            i
          want
        you here
     to wipe away
     my tears and
      to make it                 i
         okay                   need
                               you with
                             me here and
                             now to make
                               me smile
                                again
               i
              love
           you more
         than anyone
         can you say
          the same
            to me



 ~Susie~


© Copyright 2000 Susan Acacio - All Rights Reserved
mama duck
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1 posted 2000-02-21 12:59 PM


HOW ADORABLE!! TEAR DROPS. NICE WORK.
devina
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Cali
2 posted 2000-02-21 01:08 AM


This is really endearing!!! Hope that last question is YES!!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Lost Dreamer
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Somewhere near the Rainbow
3 posted 2000-02-21 09:30 AM


I love how you did this, very creative.
Angel
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4 posted 2000-02-21 10:40 AM


mama duck~
Thank you so much, you're too kind  .

devina~
Me too! Now I'm Still waiting on an answer  .

Lost Dreamer~
Thank you so much too  !  


 ~Susie~


Sven
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5 posted 2000-02-21 12:58 PM


Angel I love this!!

I love the form and the words. . . they truly come from the heart. . .

Reminds me of cummings or some of the "concrete" poems of the 60's and 70's. . .

Really beautiful!!
---------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Angel
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6 posted 2000-02-21 05:40 PM


Sven
I'm so glad you enjoyed it   although the 70's and especially 60's were just a bit before my time..


 ~Susie~


Songbird
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7 posted 2000-02-21 06:03 PM


Very creative and sooo.. sweet!
HelmutB
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8 posted 2000-02-21 07:47 PM


Romantic yes I say it is
Very nice design with this
Your poem is so nice
Sweet

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


Marge Tindal
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9 posted 2000-02-21 10:16 PM


Angel~
THIS IS GORGEOUS !
I LOVE IT.
LOVE THE CONTENT.
LOVE THE FORMAT.
Just LOVE it.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Angel
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10 posted 2000-02-21 10:26 PM


SeptSong
Thank you so much. I'm so happy you enjoyed it  .

HelmutB
Your words are too kind, sir.  You're making me blush  .

Mentor Marge
All of your beautiful poems in the form of pictures were the inspiration for this. I can only hope to be as talented as you one day  .


 ~Susie~


Alwye
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In the space between moments
11 posted 2000-02-21 10:35 PM


So beautiful!  Very creative format, I love it!  

 *Krista Knutson*

"Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~


WhtDove
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12 posted 2000-02-22 12:02 PM


Let me add that I love this too! Original

 <*\\\><

There's only two ways you can go...
One way you can save your riches,
And the other will save your soul.
Rich Mullins

Elizabeth Santos
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13 posted 2000-02-22 12:11 PM


So simple and sweet, yet it says so much
Very creative
Liz

JamesMichael
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14 posted 2000-02-22 06:31 AM


"I love you more than anyone
can you say the same to me"
cause if you can I'd love to stay
and if you can't I'm on my way.
James

Angel
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15 posted 2000-02-22 03:33 PM


Alwye
Thanks so much!

WhtDove
I'm glad you liked it

Liz
Thank you too

jmlee12345
I love those lines  .


 ~Susie~


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