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Eloise
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since 1999-11-27
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Wyoming

0 posted 2000-02-20 10:05 PM


God needed a star
To make the heavens bright.
So He took you away
From us tonight.

I will not grieve
For you today.
Because all your pain
Has now gone away.

My only regret
Is that I didn't say good-bye.
So I'll just look up and wave
To that diamond in the sky.

You will forever
Be close to my heart.
Though time and distance
Have split us apart.


© Copyright 2000 Eloise - All Rights Reserved
CMGrimm
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 685
USA
1 posted 2000-02-20 10:11 PM


About eight years ago my nephew's father died in an accident...My nephew was only 4 at the time.  When he got a little older, (old enough to understand that his father wasn't coming back) it took some time to make him see that his father was never very far from him...

Even today..eight years later, he and I can still pick out our fathers from all the stars in the heavens, our own, diamonds in the sky.

Lovely creation Eloise....truly set off a series of lovely yet painful memories...

Chris


 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.

sonjes
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since 2000-02-18
Posts 564
North Carolina
2 posted 2000-02-20 11:49 PM


If I can manage to type, I will tell you that I loved this poem.  So poignant and bittersweet.  At least, for me.  It made me think about the stars that I like to see.  The loved ones that I miss terribly to this day are never far from my thoughts.  YOu have brought them to the forefront once again.  
Thank you, Eloise for another inspiration.

Eloise
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Posts 1096
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3 posted 2000-02-21 01:57 PM


Chris and sonjes, I am so sorry for your loss.  But it is always comforting to know that they are never far away.  They are always here in spirit and thought.  Thank you both for sharing.
Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

4 posted 2000-02-21 05:53 PM


This is a beautiful poem, Eloise. It is so hard to give up a person that we love, even when we know that their passing will end their suffering, and many times thinking of them still being "with" us can help to allay our own.
Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

5 posted 2000-02-21 05:56 PM


Eloise, this is so softly touching - wonderful writing.

How are you? - Missed ya.

K

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

6 posted 2000-02-21 08:02 PM


beautiful, sweet touching poem...
take care, janet marie

 I love you
Is all that you can't say-
Years gone by and still...
Words don't come easily
Like I love you, I love you...
But you can say baby...
Baby can I hold you tonight
Maybe if I told you the right words
At the right time you'd be mine...
Tracy Chapman



Denise
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7 posted 2000-02-21 10:51 PM


This is beautifully touching, Eloise! Very lovey!

Denise

Eloise
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8 posted 2000-02-22 12:12 PM


Thank you all for your responses.

Kamla, I'm doing fine.  I've missed hearing from you too.  Email me when you get a chance.  

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9 posted 2000-02-22 12:15 PM


Eloise~
This beautiful poem made me go out
and look up at the evening sky ...
saying hello to all my 'stars'.
Thank you, hon for this lovely piece
of your heart, for with it you touched mine.
**HUGS**
~*Marge*~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


Eloise
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since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096
Wyoming
10 posted 2000-02-22 12:49 PM


Your welcome Marge.  I'm glad you enjoyed it, and thank you for the hug.  
nonsense
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since 2000-02-20
Posts 8

11 posted 2000-02-22 03:29 AM


This is a very symbolic and lovley poem. I think that is very beautiful way to look at that, "diamonds in the sky". It's very spiritual.
Nichole

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

12 posted 2000-02-22 04:20 AM


Eloise, this is very beautiful and very touching!!  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



Eloise
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since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096
Wyoming
13 posted 2000-02-22 08:59 PM


nonsense and Dark Angel, thank you for your comments and I'm glad you enjoyed this.
Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
14 posted 2000-02-22 09:21 PM


Very moving poem, Eloise
Beautifully written
Liz

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