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Eclipse |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
Wax and wane, so our lives go Drifting across the moon Hiding it, diming it, shading it from the world Only to pull away to allow a slicing beam Of healing moonlight down Darkness is settling As Lady Night's cloak cools The skies warmed body And the sun rolls away Casting a lasting shadow Brightness drifting, losing its grasp Until it slips away like a defeated silk mane Of a fiery unicorn drawing the chariot Pulling the Sun from your sight And leaving the void inside To grow without fight But what if the night doesn't settle Casting away the orb that's our very own star? The day could remain forever in your eyes Warming, growing life, keeping the cold away Until loneliness is but a nightmare The fate worse than death, it seems Or having the warmth fade, disappear, then rise In endless falls and rises in your heart Is to have the sunlight be right in front of your eyes As you watch the darkness eat it away Slowly, yet swiftly, a living shadow crosses Drinking, nibbling, gourging itself As a fiendish dragon steals across the night Eating away the sun, the moon, the light falling in waterfalls Until there's nothing left The moments are blinding The acid is painful For that time when you see how hate can caste its ghost Across the sky Loss will be on your mind The shadows move; the light's returned Dull in your spirit For you truly see how much everything is worth In the agony you feel during that time Total eclipse of the heart < !signature--> "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." [This message has been edited by Astraea (edited 02-19-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Astraea~ How lovely and very descriptive. Sounds like the ~Writer's Moon~ for sure. Wonderful ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Astraea, as Marge said, so descriptive, and some wonderful imagery! "Darkness is settling As Lady Night's cloak cools The skies warmed body And the sun rolls away Casting a lasting shadow" Especially liked this stanza! (o: |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
What a beautiful piece you have created there Liked it very much The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
"Total eclipse of the heart" Nice ending  |
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