Open Poetry #6 |
Stormy Night |
CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Stormy Night I can hear the back door slamming, behind you as you run out into the rain. I hear the car engine roar to life, and headlights flash across our living room walls... I look out the door just in time to see you disappear, around the corner... Lightening flashes...blinding me... I look again and you are gone. I am all alone I pray that you will come back to me. I close my eyes and pray silently... Thunder jolts me from my daze, the phone rings, My heart jumps in my chest I hope it is you... My breath fails me, as my mind tries hard to comprehend the message... You are gone. Christopher M. Grimm Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Ummm...I have no words. That doesn't happen often...Great job! |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Uhmm....My apologies to anyone who may feel misled....this is a poem to and about a friend of mine. He is struggling to overcome a terrible tragedy. I have mentioned before that sometimes I write to help myself to understand someone's pain...this is that particular situation I was referring to...sorry if anyone may have felt misled...I had no intentions to and hadn't noticed the connections between this and another post of mine until pointed out by another poet. Chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
And thanks Marilyn for the kind words....I'm hoping that you happen to re-read this...so that you may have your voice back.. (nervous laugh).. Thanks everyone for I'm hoping your understanding. Chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi CMGrimm, I want you to know that this poem tells me that you pay close attion to your friends in need and that your have a great deal of affection for others. True love and compasion for others is hard to find. Very nicely written. Cerenity-1 |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very vivid and expressive and interesting to read. James |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
You did a great job with this poem, it is great when we can put ourselves in another's shoes and write to understand. I have fun sometimes just pretending to be someone I don't even know and see what what can transpire. There are many ways of being creative and I enjoyed your creation here. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Chris, I do this too...and it's that perception, that willingness and oftimes "need" to place ourselves into the realm of another's life, that fuels many aspects of our insight and creative expression. Oh, and this poem is superb. Claire |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Thanks Cerenity, James, Dreamer and MeadowMuse...Your kind comments are always appreciated. I'm glad to see I'm not the only one.... Chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
This is the third poem like this I have read tonight...and my goosebumps are on a rampage... This is a wonderful poem...though such a awful tragedy...I am truly sorry for your friend... Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Thanks Breathe....giving a wonderful Artist such as you goosebumps is as big a compliment as I should ever hope to receive...Thanks for your too kind responses. Chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
If this were about you, it would be excellent. If not about you, it's REALLY excellent. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I like the way you write--and enjoyed reading this poem. I often write poems about others, or even fictional to make a point...I agree with Balladeer's excellent. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ChrisG~ This happens to be a very vivid poem. It touched me with it's sincerity. You are a great friend to have. Even without the explanation, it was riveting. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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