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Open Poetry #6

Hiding?

devinmaria
Member

since 2000-02-14

Posts 130
Middletown, Ohio

0 posted 2000-02-16 12:58 PM

thoughts of doubt
only thoughts of why
you say sadness hides
in the pupils of my eyes
troublesome words
slither from my lips
confusing looks
make your stomach do flips
paramoia lurks aimlessly
deep in your thoughts
aimlessly paranoid
deeply distraut
words meaning little
the search for attention
looks falsely communicate
the longing for affection
unexplanable
the wierdness i show
aimlessly paranoid
hiding? no

Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica

Meadowmuse
Member Elite

since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

1 posted 2000-02-16 02:11 PM

An interesting darkness here, an intriguing piece. I liked your ~

"you say sadness hides
in the pupils of my eyes"

Keep writing!
Claire

HelmutB
Senior Member

since 2000-01-06

Posts 964
Canada

2 posted 2000-02-16 09:22 PM

I don't think that you have anything to hide
I liked your poem, well done

The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Parker
Member Elite

since 2000-01-06

Posts 3129
ON

3 posted 2000-02-16 10:31 PM

I really like the style, us used here. Great poem.

Parker

devina
Member Elite

since 1999-10-28

Posts 3539
Cali

4 posted 2000-02-16 10:55 PM

I can see that you're to the point huh??? You've stated your case well...with a powerful ending!!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

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