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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA 
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Let Me Go Let me go Let me leave Let me be Let me breathe. Let my fire Burn your flesh Let my taste be on your breath. Let me go Let me leave Let me be Let me breathe. Christopher M. Grimm Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Nurse Crachet Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318They know where I am! |
I'll let you go if you don't tell them where I am. Wow, this was intense my heads still spinning or was it that snake bite. |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Adder girl..... lol Perhaps it was the snake bite. Thanks for reading and commenting. Chris. |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
mmmm.....short, but to the point...sensual--loved that second verse.  Great job.  Bobbycat =^..^= ~~Blessed Be!~~ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Chris~ Two replies pop into my mind .... the first is NEVER and the other is OXYGEN ! GET THE MAN SOME OXYGEN ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
I'm here...you can all breathe now...*laughing at Marge* Chris...I'm kinda partial to this...Gee I wonder why?...  )Simple yet powerful! I love it... Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Short and simple and sensual and lots of other s words flying around. I enjoyed. Mike |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Chris, you've succeeded in saying so much with just a few simple (but extremely well~constructed) lines. I enjoyed this very much...nearly "too" much! Claire |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I like this one! Elegantly and simple... now breathe.... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Chris....you've managed to say a great deal with very few words....nicely done |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I think I have a little different take on this poem then everyone else. I see your second stanza contradicting your other two. You want me to let you go, let you leave but you want me to do this with your taste and fire on my flesh? Hmmmm Me thinks not! lol. Great writing.  |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Ahhhh yes, the push and pull of love! Let met go, don't let me go! Nice one, food for thought shall we say? Corinne |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
HA HA HA....GREAT Great responses everyone...I think Marilyn and Corinne really maybe capture the full gist of the poem. Asking to be left alone, to leave and forget what they have left behind them yet not allow the other to forget about them.....sound familiar??? Thanks All. Sorry to try and throw a curve...but I know you all will enjoy it. Chris. Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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January Flowers Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 209South Carolina |
"let my taste be on your breath" Interesting. Quick read, Fun read, Slow read, "know" read. Agree on the sensual thing- very heated poem. |
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Betty Gravitt Member
since 1999-09-11
Posts 222Georgia United States |
CMGrimm... I can feel the plea in this. Very nice. B Gravitt |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Short strokes Breathtaking Great Poem Rich |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
there is a very intense plea here....succinctly stated. good work. |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Thanks JF, BG, Spiked and Beki....glad you all enjoyed it. Chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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