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A way to fly |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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I storm-fraught defenseless find that in a pace I travel back and gasp for breaths already taken A path of wander peaceful hides just around a corner passed before and so I cry just fly little child already grown see this life with feathered eyes but wings are fallen things and my words soundless on the thermals too high for reach and here I step dragging lived time into a now I can't quite define calling for my flight in a silence still of yesterday < !signature--> 'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 02-15-2000).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kamla, you have the most feathered eyes I have ever known...and you fly towards destiny. Wonderful poem! [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 02-15-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kamla~ You just flit right to my heart. I love this. 'I travel back and gasp for breaths already taken' Wow, gal ! So wonderful to see you here. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
"But wings are fallen things" What a deeply, exquisitely sad line, Kamla. Well done on this bit of introspection and philosophy. --Kess Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
A path of wander peaceful hides just around a corner passed before I loved this...almost like cycles we can't seem to break out of...or missed moments.. Incredible! Not even strong enough word to give this poem it's proper credit... Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Severn, A little peep into your deep. Enjoyed the read *L* Sy |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This....and you...have been greatly missed. Don't leave the nest again!!!...(please?) Your normal, standard exceptional writing  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Kamla....your presence has been sadly missed here....lovely words that soar like you |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Stunning...this is so packed full of emotion. Beautiful work! *Krista Knutson* One lives in the hope of becoming a memory. ~*Antonio Porchia*~ |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
I love your writing style, Severn! Corinne |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Away for a while, then back with a bang. Triumphant though subdued  return K."dragging lived time into a now I can't quite define" Says it all! Welcome back K. -*Hope the dream. ---*Wish the future. ------*Live the now. |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
Gone from sight maybe K, but not for a moment from my heart ... freezingly beautiful P |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Soul-Sister you are truly amazing you know that!! This is Awesome, beautiful!!find that in a pace I travel back and gasp for breaths already taken WOW! Welcome back sweet butterfly, have missed you so much!!< !signature--> What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 02-16-2000).] |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
This is breathtaking girl...it has an "exhausted peace" about it. I can certainly relate to that....Also glad to see you back - your writing shows you well. Hope to see a little more now! ** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is wonderful, Kamla! Welcome back! I missed you!  Denise |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is wonderful! Every phrase is perfect! |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Some poetry stands out from the rest, poetry that speaks of where poets go, where many of us want to be, but not yet ready. You are there!!! Danny |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow is all I can say. This pulls at all the emotion within me. Very beautiful and desceptively sad. I love the line, "but wings are fallen things" Wonderful work, Kamla. Michael |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Seldom have I seen a poem like this With words so beautiful bliss Don't ever search the ground for a clue Soaring through the Poetic sky that should be you Thank you The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I sure am glad your vacation's over This is simply wonderful!!.. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Wow guys! Thanks for the welcome back! Martie - thanks hon - you know you're the one with wings... Marge(y) - it is just wonderful to be back...thanks my friend. Kess - why thankyou! It is a truth to me, that statement. Breathe - yes, I think that is precisely what I was saying...thanks! Sy - and loves and hugs back to you... 'Deer - look, I WILL be staying quite firmly in that nest if you and the Vienna sausages are anywhere near my woods!  Thankyou Kind Sir.Ruthy - missed you girl - hugs and thanks. Alwye - thankyou! Corinne - it is entirely mutual! Chris - and what, pray tell, was the for? Bah humbug to you! Thanks, and not surprised you can identify with this.P - such a freezing reply - thanks...Sir. A of L - hey beautiful - I can just hear you say that!! Thanks dear... Femme - nice to see you too... Denise you sweetie - hugs. Suthern - wow! A perfect...LOL, not sure but your faith in my poem is so encouraging! Thankyou so much. Danny - that is a truly beautiful thing to say. Thankyou. Michael - thankyou my friend...sharing a sad smile with you. Helmut - I have to say thankyou for that beautiful verse, wow, just lovely. 's.Nan - ANOTHER ! WHY??? Hehe - didn't entirely go away, just wasn't here...Thanks. K'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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mirjam Member
since 1999-11-24
Posts 246Auckland, New Zealand |
Oh Kamla, your words are so haunting! "gasp for breaths already taken" so often it feels like we're going round in circles, rehashing, facing our past over and over, and not moving forward. Kamla know that you WILL fly again, and you will fly high, and far, and forward, and into better days, new days, days filled with that peace you feel you have bypassed. Keep looking up Kamla, and keep writing!!! I have every bit of confidence in you my friend. |
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mirjam Member
since 1999-11-24
Posts 246Auckland, New Zealand |
oh and i forgot to say that i really loved this! I guess it usually goes without saying, but it's nice to hear it eh? [This message has been edited by mirjam (edited 02-21-2000).] |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
And a Happy Brithday too The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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