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here's to missing you, breathing and shiny floors
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here's to missing you, breathing and shiny floors |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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-one- I miss you, yes, my heart, the most, I think, and you are still very much inside my head but my body has long since made absent the ache and refuses to be reminded of the gentleness of your touch your kisses so soft. but how I miss the brown of your deep eyes and how I could see into more than just today in your your laugh and your smile… but your hands, your hands my love will never be gone from me I can close my eyes and feel them still your hands loved me, even before you said so with your eyes -two- inside the red inside my head they overflow the tears and pour down my shirt filling the red until open the window I must or I will drown. fresh air bathes relief maybe in my missing you I just forgot to breathe. -three- you are gone and I am left to make some sense of it all by myself and so I put on knee pads and rubber gloves and meticulously (irrationally) wax the floors as if it will bring you back -four- and if I sleep instead of pacing with the stars as my company will I miss you any less? you are my quiet the still place in my soul, pace for pace step by step you softly numb my thoughts until the tired makes my feet stop and so I ask if I sleep instead will you be any less gone? [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 02-15-2000).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Such powerful words that speak more than what is written on the page. The pain, the longing, the loss is so evident here. |
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Wizzard Member
since 2000-02-09
Posts 209 |
Corazon, I can see that this person that you have written about has left a very deep impression in your heart. I hope that your heart heal`s soon and your able to find another so that you can put away the glove`s and knee pad`s...Sorry..just trying to make ya smile  very nice Corazon Thank`s for sharing. Today is the first day of the rest of my life. And the begining of a new one. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
These are wonderful... I especially identify with the last three... I just lack your energy! LOL Yanno... if you run out of floors to wax, I have floors... dishes... yardwork.... even ovens to scrub! C'mon over!! LOL. |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
I have an even better idea, you two continue writing and I'll keep reading and we'll employ someone to wax the floors, save our poor aging knees..  HUSG Ouvrir mon coeur et âme |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
hoot, thanks, yep anniversaries are hard...too many memories come piling in... wizzard, thanks, and yes you did make me suthern, yep....missing you poems are universal I guess...and yep I was just thinking about packing my cleaning stuff to come and visit.....lolol....NOT! rainbow...well if I had a preference, would rather write than wax lol....thanks and hugs |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Aw c'mon, Corazon..... I need you! LOL. For RG's idea has one major flaw... we have no money to hire help! LOL. (Well, actually two major flaws. *EG* MY knees aren't aging like some bony British ones I could mention. *EG*) |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
hey I could send you both some knee pads??? *very helpfully putting all her pennies on the table to count them* |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I'd much rather you use yours... no use in buying more... just bring your helpful self on over! *G* My plump knees and I will just watch your cleaning frenzy and enjoy the benefits! LOL. |
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jascanvey Member
since 1999-12-26
Posts 130England |
Wow, these ARE powerful words. You lot can clean, I'll make the coffee!!  |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You have expressed so well, this feeling, and made it so real, that I know. I have had my days, not with waxing, but the vacuum cleaner. I like the way you write! |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
"your hands loved me, even before you said so with your eyes"--So beautifully put! "maybe in my missing you I just forgot to breathe"--this one makes me melt. I must say the last part was my favorite. I love the image of the stars keeping you company as you pace the floors, missing your special someone. "and so I ask if I sleep instead will you be any less gone?" *Sigh* You sure know how to turn a phrase. It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley |
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freckles Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 160Virginia USA |
WOW..........powerful words........nothing seems to make the person be "any less gone", eh? There aren't enough floors to wax in this world to make that happen. I look forward to reading more, Corazon. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Everyone else has said it already, but - Simply beautiful - and such loss. 'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corazon~ I am impressed with this piece. How beautifully done. 'maybe in my missing you I just forgot to breathe' AWESOME ! Could we do ~Maids Are Us~ ? Too much fun with this zany crew ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Gawd...this is incredible! You are incredible! *grin* So simple ...yet so powerful... I'm suddenly feeling small...*bowing at your feet* I'm not worthy..I'm not worthy!!! Beautiful work Corazon! Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Makes me wince, and understand. Very well done. Wow... Mike |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks all, somehow your enjoyment makes the missing a little easier |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I have read this again and understand that you understand. |
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