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Enola Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 138England |
The first poem I ever wrote, I couldn't think of a title, any suggestions are welcome: A laughter line, Holds together a bouquet of flowers, Posted regularly, Never received. The first bud of winter, Developed in excess – Dies, A premature, wasted, hollow potential. It pretentiously throws into the bouquet, The first to be received, Returned to sender. |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Deep thoughts are within So sad that a flower did not bloom One of Natures wonders had to die I love nature Nice poem and welcome to Passions The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Dear Enola, You have nothing to worry about with your poetry, your early worries are unfounded, this is great, now you just need to write some more, welcome and welcome . |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
What about using your final line "Return to Sender" as the title? Welcome to passions by the way  |
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infinat3 sadn3ss Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 85somerset england |
i love you debs |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family! Please check your email!  |
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Wizzard Member
since 2000-02-09
Posts 209 |
Welcome Enola Nice writing.I hope to see more from you. Today is the first day of the rest of my life. And the begining of a new one. |
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Betty Gravitt Member
since 1999-09-11
Posts 222Georgia United States |
Welcome to the Passions family. And a wonderful family it is. I liked the peice. Keep writing. B Gravitt |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
I recon a good title for this great metaphorical poem would be 'Male - lost or found', notice the deliberate spelling mistake, I think this would signify the way a friend can become more or less from a simple action, be careful, and think hard about any offers you get . Love Tom . PS. I hope it all turns out the way you want with no.9 . With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one . |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
The great thing about poetry is "untitled" is always an acceptable title. Keep your gift truly yours and you will do fine! |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Wonderful writing and welcome to passions. I agree with sonjes...untitled is ALWAYS an acceptable title...(I have lots and lots of untitled...it's almost like a serial with me...lol)(thinking of starting an anthology and calling it...you guessed it..UNTITLED)lol anyway..thanks for the enjoyable read. Chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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mete out Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 270england |
***debs, this is absolutely fantastic. i am sorry that i missed it first time around... at least this way it gets shot up to the top where it belongs... love always. I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Excellent beginning, please send us more Welcome to passions Liz |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
Great first post...wonderful writing..welcome to Passions! |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
good job welcome to passions i was also thinking "return to sender" for the title |
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