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Mike
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since 1999-06-19

Posts 2462

0 posted 2000-04-03 02:12 PM

When I was young, I'd stub my toe,
Feel stinging pain of childish blow,
Occasionally a family squabble,
On broken foot, I once did hobble.
Was fleeting pain, ache would not stay,
For with the dawn, would slip away.

Now I am grown, inside I feel,
A different pain, that will not heal,
Lancing, searing, deep sorrow's bite,
Fear ache of day, I rue the night,
Life ripped away, forever gone,
Night's endless void, no more the dawn.

ESP
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since 2000-01-25

Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....

1 posted 2000-04-03 02:56 PM

This is a very sad poem. Chin up hun. The dawn will return to your life yet. Blue skies can be around the corner.....

Beautiful poem.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2000-04-03 03:05 PM

Mike, I started to write you a long letter here, then deleted it all...and just want to say strong and wrenching poem and hugs.

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 04-03-2000).]

poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

3 posted 2000-04-03 03:35 PM

I think the older we get, the pains of yesteryears and days gone by grow more intense. All the things we should have done, or done differently - it's never too late to start anew - to make tomorrow different...remember that. Beautiful poem BTW.

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

4 posted 2000-04-03 08:36 PM

Some pain just never seems to go away. Especially the pain of losing someone close to death. It takes a long time to wrap your mind around that one. Great poem, Mike.

Denise

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

5 posted 2000-04-03 08:43 PM

Wow! Awesome words, Mike. Very moving work here... I know that "void" well.

Michael

CherylLynnMckee
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since 2000-03-28

Posts 215

6 posted 2000-04-03 09:49 PM

Thanks.. you found the words I have been searching for all day to desribe how I was feeling...believe me I understand. And I agree with poet f. Fetale.. we are harder on ourselves as we grow older.And the nights are the hardest and the longest.Thank you for sharing it.

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

7 posted 2000-04-03 10:01 PM

Dawn is a very fleeting moment, isn't it???
Nice work, Mike...

mariee66
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since 2000-01-30

Posts 596
Recess, OfYourMind

8 posted 2000-04-03 10:31 PM

The dawn will come again~
And with that dawn, your soul will sing~
Marie~

"Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind;
And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard

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