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Open Poetry #6

Tossed to the Wind

Effigy
Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

0 posted 2000-04-16 06:29 PM

I remember wasted times.
Wasted you and wasted me.
I remember the way the wind
blew echoing the chimes,
as I fell down on one knee.
I still feel love is lost,
and we haven’t been back since,
to this place of heavenly wind.
For all this wonder, a trivial cost,
nothing much more than my mere innocence.
A cycle of life, evolving, it all still goes on.
It’s strange how we strive, strange how we dive,
right off the cliffs into the sky, daring the wind.
Underestimating the power, if only we had known,
our connection, that spark might still be alive.
It has all been said and done, I guess.
You’ve gotten yours, and now I’ve got time.
Anything that might have been left, tossed to the wind.
No remains, nothing left, not the slightest mess.
All the memories, just echoes wind blowing through a chime.

Mike
Member Elite

since 1999-06-19

Posts 2462

1 posted 2000-04-16 08:24 PM

Nicely written. Enjoyed.

netswan
Senior Member

since 2000-03-28

Posts 1369
Washington

2 posted 2000-04-16 10:56 PM

Powerfully sad -- nicely written.

netswan

forne_marin
Member

since 2004-04-13

Posts 140
Spartanburg, South Carolina

3 posted 2004-04-15 11:56 PM

I really enjoyed "Tossed to the Wind", especially the line "You've gotten yours, and now I've got time". The reader expects the line "and now I've got MINE". By switching around this cliche you effectively draw the reader in closer. Very nice.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2004-04-20 04:36 AM

you've been missed...where are you?

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