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-- A Skydiver's Affiar --
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-- A Skydiver's Affiar -- |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL 
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-- A Skydiver's Affiar -- (4-15-2000) I'd love to fly, and kiss the sky, without this comfy chair It's so much more, when out the door, than the feeling of the air I'll fall too fast, for you to grasp, but your cheating winds will know I'll watch you stare, as through my hair, your gasping breath will blow Then rushing back, you'll see our past, that warm summer breeze With bees they've danced, with leaves romanced, with me they only tease I've seen them fly, with grace and style, they need not fight to stay Alone with you I dream, and still you scream, there 'll never come a day Your clouds will paw, through them I'll fall, your grasp I can escape Your planes may climb, your birds may mind, but me you can't embrace I'll linger down, until her ground, oh how she welcomes me The thrill is better, you may have met'er, her name is gravity --Dave "The storm rises up when the shadows descend every beat of my heart every day without end I will stand like a rock I will bend till I break till theres no more to give if thats what it takes I will risk everything I will fight I will bleed I will lay down my life if thats what you need every second I live thats the promise I make" I have no idea who wrote this... tell me if you know. =) |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
WhiteNite~ I really enjoyed the 'free-fall'. What exhilaration. Loved the way you sneaked 'her' name in at the close. Clever !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Great writing here, WhiteNite ... "This is where you will win the battle .... in the playhouse of your mind." Maxwell Maltz |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I'll fall too fast, for you to grasp, but your cheating winds will know I'll watch you stare, as through my hair, your gasping breath will blow Then rushing back, you'll see our past, that warm summer breeze With bees they've danced, with leaves romanced, with me they only tease I've seen them fly, with grace and style, they need not fight to stay Alone with you I dream, and still you scream, there 'll never come a day --------------- very cool my dave-gator... you really want to do this dont you?? I dont know if I could? I think I stick to my fantasy of a hotair balloon ride.  great poem..loved the flow...read smooooth as butter*smile* later, jan-gator Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Marge - Thanks.. I liked the ending myself.. the line before the last was hard to put together though... I think I could have done better. =) Pepper - Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it. Jan - "The storm rises up when the shadows descend every beat of my heart every day without end I will stand like a rock I will bend till I break till theres no more to give if thats what it takes I will risk everything I will fight I will bleed I will lay down my life if thats what you need every second I live thats the promise I make" I have no idea who wrote this... tell me if you know. =) [This message has been edited by WhiteNite (edited 04-16-2000).] |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Hey boy! Whew...I got a little nervous there at first, you know, with all we've talked about, and all...I thought you were gonna tack MY name on the end of this! ROFL So glad it turned out the way it did, I'd hate to have to come to your home and beat you up! Um...(twiddling thumbs)...my mailbox happens to be empty, you know anything about that?  Catch you later - uh...maybe next time you jump! How's that? |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
What a great poem--I really enjoyed it! |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
oh man that was a good one. Loved the ending. Jeffrey |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Femme - [lol] My dear sweet poetic friend... I'd like to tack your name on the end, but it just wouldn't have had the same effect... =) But then if you're promising a visit maybe I should go edit it. =) J/K You can catch me anytime, but I'd much prefer when I fall... when I jump I usually have control over my landings. =) You're mail box is empty? Nope, don't know anything about that... but I resent my last message just in case. =) Martie - Glad you liked it. You should try the real thing sometime. "The storm rises up when the shadows descend every beat of my heart every day without end I will stand like a rock I will bend till I break till theres no more to give if thats what it takes I will risk everything I will fight I will bleed I will lay down my life if thats what you need every second I live thats the promise I make" I have no idea who wrote this... tell me if you know. =) |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Oh.. didn't see your reply Jeff.. thanks... a compliment from you is deffinitely of value. |
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