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Dr.Moose1
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0 posted 2000-04-14 06:56 PM


Percieved through the veil
Dormant of Flourish
Mis-concieved , un-assailed
of Portent to be nourished

The Knights of Illusion
from battle hard fought
In plight of confusion
as prattle their thoughts

Perverse Apparitions
on Capricious Steeds
Accursed with Ambition
Ignitious of Deeds

Deploy Concentration
Pre-cursor of Wit
Envoy of Salvation
dispersed as befits

Once drawn by the page
Sir Real's apprentice
A pawn as presaged
found " Non Compos Mentis "



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Poet deVine
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1 posted 2000-04-14 07:54 PM


I love this!!! Good job...I feel the urge to write something like this..thanks for the inspiration..  
netswan
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2 posted 2000-04-14 09:13 PM


Wow, Dr. Moose, this is great! I really
like it.  You have done an excellent
job with the use of the english language.

Teresa King

Dr.Moose1
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3 posted 2000-04-14 09:39 PM


PDV,
Actually , as said before , inspiration is from , those who'd have more .
This one was tougher , than the first ,had to get " Big Book " , to finish the verse .

Netswan,
Glad you enjoyed , pretty new format to me ,working around double rhymes within each stanza , don't even know if there's a recognized term for this . Maybe some-one can tell me ?

Nan
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4 posted 2000-04-14 09:41 PM


Now you know that I'm a staunch proponent of the "Big Book"... Nice job Sir Antlers...
Dr.Moose1
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5 posted 2000-04-15 11:30 PM


I will shame myself no more
Doc

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