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I Yearn to Whisper Yes
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I Yearn to Whisper Yes |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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(this is a rewrite of a poem posted some time ago) I yearn to Whisper Yes I yearn to whisper yes to you under a tree somewhere in the old south, a willow tree perhaps who’s tears drift slowly, cleanly layering my hair in green, and you with scarlet eyes, sunset lit would sing to me a deep and true melody that lingers like a sigh against my hair in touching tribute to the curve that bares the loving night. We would be surrounded in sound, a cicada concert with our whispering breath, then stars would dim as moonlight opened soft against the alabaster thigh of forever. And this memory of a day that never was will summon me on fragrant nights noisy with other sounds to weep this unspent passion that yearns for you, to close you into my warmth, to whisper yes somewhere under a tree in the old south. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 04-13-2000).] |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Sweet...Romantic....I love this Jeffrey |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
martie you are on a poetic roll, everything I read of yours is fantastic....great sighfilled images in this one...really beautiful  |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Martie~ oh my gosh..... this is lovely...thank you for reposting it! -SEA |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
T'will be driving home from work tonight with a pleasant smile on my face. A truly lovely poem my friend. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Marty ... this leaves us wanting an encore ... do you have to end it so soon ? Rex}>{{{{o> |
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allimac12 New Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 5 |
Absolutely beautiful. It is an amazing, colorful portrait of a romantic notion that we would all love to experience. Thank you so much for sharing it. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Martie, this is I think one of my favorites of yours now. "that yearns for you, to close you into my warmth," there is something about those two lines that kind of excite me just a little too much. Great work. Parker |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jeffrey--loving is a good thing. Corazon--What a wonderful thing to say, thank you. Sea--I'm so glad you liked it. Mike my friend, keep your mind on the road! Rex Allen--I'll have to think about more...thinking.... Allimac--Yes, I think you're right--thank you. Parker--Don't make me blush--you are so sweet. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful, Martie! Denise |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Indeed very beautiful Martie! *Krista Knutson* As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins. ~*Albert Schweitzer*~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Lovely, lovely, lovely. You've sure got a way with your thoughts lady. Very romantic to be sure. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You always manage to say it so much better than I--how I wish I'd written this! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Denise and Krista-thank you for the beautiful. Marge--You should talk...You are Ms. Romance. Thanks for your lovely words Serenity--Your writing is beautiful, but thanks for such a wonderful compliment! |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
"as moonlight opened soft against the alabaster thigh of forever" Gorgeous ... (sigh) Your words constantly amaze me, Martie ... "This is where you will win the battle .... in the playhouse of your mind." Maxwell Maltz |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Martie...your word choices in this are excellent. SOme of the lines others have pointed out caught my attention right of the bat and made me say to myself"Gee...I wish I'd written that" Everything in this piece works....it's like a beautiful patchwork quilt all tied together to create a masterpiece. Well done |
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