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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Her party was a huge success she made her guests feel welcome her food was amazing but still she stood there at the edge of tears in the crowded room full of friends and family inside she cries alone Her husband’s company dinner she wore a dazzling smile he presented her on his arm and inside she cries alone The school play where her son played a pumpkin that fell over applause deafened her and inside she cries alone Two o’clock in the morning sitting at the kitchen table staring into the dark alone crying inside [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 04-12-2000).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Poet~ I can truly relate to this sad beautiful poem. I know exactly what it means to wear that smile while crying inside.-SEA |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
ouch...this gouges eyeballs...  It's sad that I can truly relate to this poem, but PdV, you've (as you always do) written such a poignant poem that will undoubtedly touch many. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
You know PdV, I'm not sure who this was written for but you of all people know I can relate well to this one. (((HUGS))) from a friend. Michael |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
That emptiness inside, something missing. Well captured, my friend. Corinne |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
So many people have this same feeling and don't know where to begin in resolving it... I surely hope this "She" found a way...  |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Wow Sharon. This is another great one. I too can relate to this piece. I am very lucky now, I am never alone like I was then. I hope everyone can find the peace that I have found in friends and in love. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Ya did it! You got one posted! This is so sad  Man have I felt like that a time or two. When everything around you tells you that you should be happy, and yet you're screaming on the inside. Excellent job Sharon. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
There's a woman inside of you screaming to get out! Someone told me that recently and it's coming out.... we hope to hear more. Kathleen |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh Sharon...this is so very sad |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
~~~~~interesting and thought provoking~~~ clear message in the words which speaks well to the quality of the poem. A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
~~~~~interesting and thought provoking~~~ clear message in the words which speaks well to the quality of the poem. A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Great poem, Sharon, that so well conveys how we can feel lost and lonely in the midst of a busy, people-filled life. Well written! Denise |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
poet D this is exceptional... very well written and expresed..I love when you write serious like this... and lord knows i relate to this piece... i feel like you were peeking in my kitchen window...next time come on in and we'll have girl talk and coffee...or a stiff drink..maybe both (smile) take care,jm Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Poet deVine, You dug deep for this one, very good. *L* |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
I can truly relate to this poem. It was if you knew me many years ago. Hugs to you from someone who has been there. |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Alone -- this poem is thought provoking and reminds me that there is no greater lonliness than sitting in a room of people and feeling alone. Nicely written. Teresa King |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Glad it's not you, deVine one  |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Flipping heck Sharon...that was like revisiting my past - the trophy . I really feel for anyone in that position...I'd rather wash dirty socks..  Big HUSG< !signature--> If I could, I would and if I didn't, I should have! [This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 04-12-2000).] |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
For some reason I like this one... can't figure it out.... oh yeah.. IT'S GOOD. =)< !signature--> "The storm rises up when the shadows descend every beat of my heart every day without end I will stand like a rock I will bend till I break till theres no more to give if thats what it takes I will risk everything I will fight I will bleed I will lay down my life if thats what you need every second I live thats the promise I make" I have no idea who wrote this... tell me if you know. =) [This message has been edited by WhiteNite (edited 04-12-2000).] |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
I just want to say that you are never alone in the feeling of being alone Jeffrey |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
I wish I did not know all too well how this feels. No matter how many there are around you, you are still horribly alone, detached, empty... Excellent free verse PdV |
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Ella Junior Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 20 |
Your poem was very emotional it touched my heart. There is nothing that compares to the void you have in your soul when you are feeling alone. |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Tears here, PdV...that's about all I can say. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh this is excellent Sharon, yet so very sad. What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow, did you capture it perfectly or what?....wow....great job! |
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