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devina
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0 posted 2000-04-11 10:35 PM


Repentant love, age old hurt-
Wherein lies trust, doubt consorts,
Expectant sense, endless waver-
Do unto others, as is the favor.

Create a bookmark, with timeless smiles-
Be held content, as you overstep denial,
Don’t ever try hard, just be-
Our pain mingles, measured degree.

Dare not, you ever look away-
Within our sins, we tend to pay,
Reliving wounds, buried and gone-
Release faith, sing me our song.

Fate brought about lovely perfection-
Eye to eye, soul of my reflection,
See it not, with muddled view-
As I reside, deep within you.

Common men, fall sooner than we-
As they pray upon their destiny,
Hear not the whining, endless rhyme-
Of bitter mistakes, saddened times.

I tend to judge, not by fault-
But simple love, inside your heart,
Make no mistake, cause no worry-
I beg of you- Don’t say Sorry…



 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...


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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2000-04-11 10:48 PM


devina...
this poem is born of PERFECTION...wow i love this one
and that last stanza...way perfect.
excellent writing.
take care,jm

 Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders
And it makes me want to touch you there.
And the light in your eyes makes me feel
Like there's something much better out there
Something kind...
And I know someday I might be looking around
Trying to find some purpose
Well purpose it can't be that hard to find
As long as I've got the wind...
The wind and your love to carry me.
vertical horizon



Alwye
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2 posted 2000-04-11 10:56 PM


I agree with Janet, the last verse is a perfect end to an incredible poem.  Exellent work.  

 *Krista Knutson*

As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins.
~*Albert Schweitzer*~

Sven
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3 posted 2000-04-12 12:13 PM


Excellent Devina. . . nice to see you back!!  The words just sing. . .

Wonderful my friend.. .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Poet deVine
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4 posted 2000-04-12 01:07 AM


That last verse was a kicker! Good job!  
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5 posted 2000-04-12 03:33 AM


awesome--THIS is true soul display...lovely, with an edge--thank you.  y'spoke to me with this one, 'sis'.  it shall dwell in my heart.
Michael
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6 posted 2000-04-12 04:10 AM


True love is never having to say you're sorry dear.  Someone very special to me told me that just last night.  Love you.

Michael

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7 posted 2000-04-12 07:05 AM



I echo all the others and add though true... loving someone means never having to say you're sorry...but if you do say it you better mean it....the "I'm sorry's" and the "I Love You's" tend to loose something when they are accompanied by pain.  You did a remarkable job...thank you for sharing the gift that flows within you.


 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.


Marge Tindal
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8 posted 2000-04-12 03:30 PM


Devina~
Marge is just sitting here
G - R - I - N - N - I - N - G !
KARMA !

*Michael~

Love you both !
~*Marge*~




 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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