»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #6
»
Unfurled and Danced
| Open Poetry #6 |
|
Unfurled and Danced |
|
|
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
|
Unfurled and Danced Spring has found me with its bright sky, found me unfurled and danced by the glorious opening of color that perfumes the day with peach, plum and apple blossoms and nights of dusky jasmine’s heady dreaming. Of course I was lost, my head in the poem of this small corner of my world reaching past season into the core that burns no matter, just burns thoughts made into words, ropes of words that I climb or fall from and dangle drenched and unsure of direction. And so I write for seasons where creation finally breathes and push it from my pores and bruise my skin in trying to say what I mean and the moon still calls me and I know I haven’t said it right not to the full round brightness of its meaning and the stars unfold me and I find that it doesn’t matter only breathing matters great and deep and powerful til I am cemented to the sky with air so heavy that I am drowning. And what is color to this corner that begs so much from me, what of the wide open door and the precious fern dappled porch and the constant need of attention to water the vibrant greening day? I lay down under a sharp sun this pressed rhythm light and cloudless and full and the explosion is so quiet that the humming comes closer and whispers and I can’t quite hear it. |
||
| © Copyright 2000 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Martie, Thjis is full of wonderful imagery! I will have to reread it to understand it better and take it in more fully, but it was very enjoyable. I was hooked from the very beginning. David2  |
||
|
Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
This is wonderfully done Martie. Very thought provoking indeed. |
||
|
Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Martie, I've run out of adjectives to describe your poetry ... Amazing and exquisite are but a few that come to mind ...... I devoured(sp) this piece .... |
||
|
Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Martie this is beautiful, the imagery is great!!! I could actually smell the scent of .... peach, plum and apple blossoms and nights of dusky jasmine’s heady dreaming. Beautiful!! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
||
|
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
David--I'm so glad my poem hooked you and thank you for taking the time to read it again. Marilyn--Provoking thought is a good thing and quite a compliment. Pepper--you spelled devoured right..and thank you for such sweet words. Dark Angel--Glad I brought you some olfactory delight. |
||
|
Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
How could any one feel spring more than this. What a lovely poem, Martie. I can smell the fragrances now Liz |
||
Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ 'thoughts made into words, ropes of words that I climb or fall from' It does NOT get any better than this ! Period. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
||
|
Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Martie, I log on every day with expectations of another of your glorious poems. You have never failed. I have this sudden desire to want to go and lay down out in the back yard and watch the setting sun. Last night, six deer were grazing in the neighbor's lawn, nibbling at the bushes. Tonight, I have this feeling they just might return. [This message has been edited by Mike (edited 04-11-2000).] |
||
|
Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Beautiful and filled with such rich, vivid imagery, Martie. Lovely work, as always. *Krista Knutson* As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins. ~*Albert Schweitzer*~ |
||
|
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--Thanks for being such a constant friend. Marge--Thank you for such a wonderful comment Mike--I'm blessed to have a friend like you! Krista--I'm so pleased that you like it. |
||
SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Martie~ ths pictures you paint with your words are so moving....this is beautiful. -SEA |
||
|
Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Your last verse is astounding. "Lying under a sharp sun" is a way of describing it that I would never have thought of. ~ ~ ~ You are filled with such beautiful poetry, it amazes me on a non-stop basis, increasingly. |
||
|
Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
"I haven't said it right"? Was THAT one of your lines? Martie, there is NOTHING you haven't said right, including this wonderful poem! |
||
|
hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh...I most certainly wish spring would find me |
||
|
Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You always say it just right, Martie! This is beautiful! Denise |
||
|
Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
will have to ditto Bal on this one...you said it perfect....you allowed us to feel right along with you....this is perfect...I love it! wow.....just reread....had to add a WOW, this is really great! [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 04-12-2000).] |
||
|
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sea--thank you for such a sweet comment. Rosemary--Here in California, the sun is sharp..thank you for liking my poetry. Balladeer--You are a dear and always make me feel so talented. Ruth--Spring is in your heart. Denise--What a nice thing to say Corazon--thank you so much for the re-read and the wow. |
||
|
Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
"til I am cemented to the sky with air so heavy that I am drowning." love this - these lines especially |
||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
hi sweets...dont mind me....just updating my library file...adding some old favs.  There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
