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Away I Run
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Away I Run |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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Away I run Deft feet of iron-shod. My heart, Encased, In cloudy pain. Ever ‘cross the road Of empty, I trod: Live mem'ries Of lonesome's remains. Away I run O'er paths Laden, With you; Echoes, Of a smile Once bestowed Upon these eyes You gazed in- Crystal blue. Brimming tears O'er Our final trial, Away I run From Justification, The lies you tell, To tell the truth. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Indeed, a hard path you traverse, my friend. I hope new light shines on your destination... and for God's sake take off those iron feet, I have some good tennies if you want them!!! Michael |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Sometimes running down that road, it seems like it will never end..but it will. I promise. Amazing poem!  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
another perfect poem...and i have noticed your always have perfect and unique presentation as well. strong emotions in this rather cryptic piece. very nice take care, jm Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
How sad and lonely. I hope once your running ends, you will have arms to fall into...love anew. ~Marie~ |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Argh ... Once again I have fumbled, and once again you have called me on it ... and you know how I hate apologizing ... Chris, this poem is heartbreaking -- much more so because I know that you mean every word of it. There is nothing more wonderful or more dangerous than being in love -- it is, in truth, the original "agony and ecstacy" -- and while I know that there is little that anything I can do or say will change about how you are hurting, I hope that you know I am here for you (as are many others). It is always darkest before the dawn, my friend ... your "perfect woman" is out there, somewhere, and I pray that you find her soon. Hugs ... --Me [This message has been edited by Skyfyre (edited 04-12-2000).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Whatever the motivation - this is...a poem that dances. K 'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
An unexpected little blow there at the end. Beautifully written and presented Liz |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Christopher~ You write such beautiful thoughts of love and love lost, of hearts on fire and tears spilled to put the fire out, of gain and of pain. Wonderfully talented you are, my friend. Hugs to you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
"The lies you tell, To tell the truth." Excellent!!! |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
May a bird fly over you, and drop a *happy poop* on you! You sure need it!  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I liked your "Ever 'cross the road of empty," Chris. Liked the whole thing, truth be told, but that line...you've got a marvelous penchant for independent thinking that translates with ease into your writing. This one is VERY nice! ~ Claire |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Chris here's another path for ya bud. This one looks brighter  Michael's right, take off those iron shoes dude! And walk the plushness of this one   |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
The agony, bitterness and loss dripped from this peace my friend. Very well written as always. Somewhere burried beneath that armour of yours beats a soft heart.  |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
This poem dances in spite of those iron shoes! I love your spirit, love the conclusion, and I always love your presentation! Good work, Christopher! |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
This poem dances in spite of those iron shoes! I love your spirit, love the conclusion, and I always love your presentation! Good work, Christopher! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
the last two lines are fabulous (and so is the rest of the poem) Corinne |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
 Hugs, m'friend..May I never be too busy to help another's load, Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed. --Author Unknown |
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Cassanova Junior Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 39Turlock, Ca. |
Hi Chris! Hi Chris I finally made it in here... you know me, takes forever to get to something! I'm still jealous! I wish I could write half as good as you! But I see you have some heavy competition here! The poetry here is amazing! Thank you for telling me about this place!!! Jason |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Amazing Christopher! And o I do relate... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent poem, Christopher! Denise |
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