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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
You stir in me A thousand echoes Of a thousand kisses And a thousand tomorrows Emotions in long decay Ever by slow degrees Never have I felt this way You move me You unlock in me So much of desire So much pain In which we conspire Memories betray innocence Ever by slow degrees Unafraid of the consequence You move me You instill in me A taste for life renewing A taste from depths Of which is my undoing Feelings long kept secret Ever by slow degrees Whatever it is, you do it You move me |
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NamelessOne Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 197Biloxi MS |
Wow i was floored by the opening stanza ...really great poem thanks for sharing JML |
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Destiny Junior Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 47 |
oh yes! the first stanza is a hook! was lost in it from the first of the thousand echoes... beautifully written... Destiny  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You stir in me A thousand echoes Of a thousand kisses And a thousand tomorrows --------------- You unlock in me So much of desire So much pain In which we conspire Memories betray innocence Ever by slow degrees Unafraid of the consequence You move me --------------- Feelings long kept secret Ever by slow degrees Whatever it is, you do it You move me ----------- this one moves me...VERY NICE... love this one...MUCH!! stalking you, while trying to move you *S* your jm ...every moment of every day... your still with me in every way. every poem and song... every rhyme and verse... your still here...like a beautiful curse. janet marie |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow this is powerful....really nicely executed...you can feel the heavens and earth move with this one |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
WOW.......WAS THAT AN EARTHQUAKE great poem Jeffrey |
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weaubleau Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 101MO |
great opening great follow-up |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
JML, as always my friend, you have spoken to me. . .I'm sure now that we were brothers in some other life. . . because you always seem to speak to me in ways that I have never known. . . I can hear the many echoes. . . they stir in my mind. . . Excellent work, my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"You stir in me A thousand echoes Of a thousand kisses" What a beautiful, moving poem. This line, alone, touched me, to be sure. So tender, your writing here. ~ Claire |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
I feel tremors~ Quakes~ This was great! Marie~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderful poem! Beautiful! Denise |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
WOW! WOW! WOW! Beautiful your bud kitkat |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Nameless one, Destiny, Janet, Corazon, Jeffrey, Weaubleau, Sven, Claire, Marie, Dsnyder, KitKat.....my brothers and sisters....YOU MOVE ME. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
JML~ when you came up with this, you had to know it would reach into the heart of all of us....ok, me anyway. Loved it. So romantic.So terribly emotional. I think I swooned!  -SEA |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Don't swoon SEA...*L* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
man...i just love being right (smile) (it dont happen often) lol cant deny these poetic brown eyes... *S* stalking you always... your jm Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Argh...sounds like you're in that first vulnerable stage of love...when everything seems so darn perfect. (sigh) Been so long since I've been there, I can't remember how it feels, to have your heart out there on a limb...thanks for reminding me how wonderful that vulnerability is. Beautiful poem that definately *moves* me! |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thanks poet femme, but this poem had no bearing on my personal life at all. If you only knew the stage of love i was actually in. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow, you certainly know how to shake the place up Very nicely done |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Hhhhhhmmmmm.....<  Sorry for the misinterpretation - I'm bad at that! LOL  Nonetheless, it was a wonderful read. I DO know that. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
JML, Wonderful poem, I'm also hooked on the first verse. Boy, everyone loved this one! You are getting just too sexy for your poems! Liz |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
That makes 2 of us now Liz...LOL |
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Joannak Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 121Indiana, USA |
...unafraid of the consequence, you move me.. so beautiful, JML, I loved it. Joanna What better way to become immortal than to wake up each day and write? Ray Bradbury |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
WOW! This one has blown me away. Not all those who wander are lost. ~J.R.R. Tolkien |
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