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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Author's Note: This poem is a little unusual for me, in that it starts out as free verse and ends as rhyme. But, that was how it came to me. When I wrote it, the anguish I was feeling over the possibility of a failed relationship expressed itself in free verse. And the beautiful emotions that the relationship gave me came out as rhyme. Deja Vu Have I done it again? Did I let my heart get ahead of me? When I sang the sweet melody of my emotions, Did you hear it, instead, as a warning call? Have I frightened you, My Love? Was I wrong to tell you how I feel? Or, would it, perhaps, have been better for me to close myself off from these lovely sensations, As I once promised myself that I would? Have I gone too quickly? Did I run too far? In my haste to reach you, did I pass you by without realizing That perhaps you were planning to travel in a different direction? Have I made a grave mistake? Did I drive you away? By expressing my desire to be with you, Did I, somehow, open a deep chasm between us? Oh, God! I hope not... For the feelings I have shared with you Are beautiful and rare. They fill my heart with tenderness, And joy, beyond compare - A special kind of magic That I know was born, above, United us in spirit, And enfolded us in love. So, tell me, was I dreaming, When I swore that you and I Could rise above life's obstacles, And dance across the sky? Or, do you feel, as I do, Dear, That this was meant to be; And that our hearts may beat as one, In priceless unity? -Troy J. Hoecherl- © Troy J Hoecherl All Rights Reserved Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh Troy....this is so sincere there is no need to appologize for anything in it....I only hope you've expressed some of these emotions in part anyway with her. |
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Destiny Junior Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 47 |
"So, tell me, was I dreaming, When I swore that you and I Could rise above life's obstacles, And dance across the sky? " oh Troy... this is heart-wrenching... beautiful.. Destiny  |
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Torrie Junior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 19 |
You have so beautifully expressed your love for this person and the way everyone feels when scared about the future of a relationship. I am one to always just say the way I feel, and then I end up feeling like this poem expressed. I totally relate with how you feel! |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Hoot - I did share the poem with her after I wrote it. The relationship didn't work out - but that's okay, cuz I never would have met my wonderful wife if things had worked out with the other woman.  Destiny - thank you for your warm words! This one came pretty easily, because it was so heart-felt. Thank you both for reading! Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Torrie - you snuck past me while I was responding to the earlier comments. Thanks so much for your kind words - it's always nice to know that others have felt the same as we do. Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
hit me just right..."In my haste to reach you, did I pass you by without realizing" *nodding head* very nice |
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