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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
QueriesThese thoughts of you, sounding, in evening's approach dance golden in pealing bells' chime. My silence is oft' such sweet reverie, told, 'ere my musings keep no trace of time. Instead, these soft cinnamon scentings and hues have focused my eyes and my minding, and buried themselves 'neath the warmth of my skin. Fragrant mem'ries, all treasures, for finding. I am born of your words, though I've tried to resist but to sentiment cannot be hidden. I have questioned with senses alive in your eyes. Still, to taste you my lips are forbidden. And what of these musings? And what of the night? And what, pray, might dreams place before me? All queries upon which I cast, ever bright, the need for your love to restore me.  Claire |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
VEry wonderful piece! I loved the dialect you used... very powerful.  "It is in our aloneness that we recognize our oneness, even as the single droplet of water knows also that it is the sea."Daniel *Cassie Roseen* |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire, this is perfectly beautiful! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Pure excellence once again, Claire |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire~ Elegantly presented. Perfection you've found in these thoughts. I really enjoyed this description- 'these soft cinnamon scentings and hues' Lovely, Claire. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Ah, Claire -- how shamelessly clever of you to shed a sliver of light on the shadowed recesses of my secret heart! (Translation: been there, done that!) --Kess Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Claire, beautiful as always. . . you do indeed have a way with the written word. . . you always amaze me with the way that you can make the words sing!! Excellent my friend. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Your poetry captures the essance of love, with a fragrance all it's own. So beautiful this is. Michael |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Dawn Eclipse...thank you for reading and letting me know what you think. I'm glad you enjoyed this one. Martie...thank you, friend. Balladeer...as long as you like it, I'm happy. Marge...for such lovely comments, I thank you. So glad you thought it was nice. Kess...and how good of you to let me know you can relate. Thank you, in earnest, for reading. Sven...that these words sang to you, I am very pleased to know. Thank you, fellow poet, for hearing the music. Michael...such an observation, coming from you, illuminates these wee hours...thank you, my friend. So glad you enjoyed this. ~ Claire |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
This is absolutely beautiful, haunting and poignant. Delicately worded, and beautifully rhymed, I love it! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Thank you, Rosemary...what sweet things to say! I'm awfully glad you enjoyed this. ~ Claire |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Hauntingly romantic! Kathleen |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
C, this is exquisite...i think its one of my most favs of yours and thats so hard to choose...this is SO pretty to read, so delicate...im wrapping it up in lace hanky and putting with all the other fragile keepsakes. perfect poem jm ...every moment of every day... your still with me in every way. every poem and song... every rhyme and verse... your still here...like a beautiful curse. janet marie |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Irish Rose and Janet Marie...thank you both for kindness much appreciated. Irish Rose...I love your nom de plume, by the way. ~ Claire |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Claire, Very beautiful! You're an artist and a pen is your brush. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
What an absolute pleasure to read and savor. |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Claire, you have done it again, girl - a perfect synergy of rhyme and emotion!  Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Michael, I am honored by those words, coming from one who knows his art. Thank you, my friend. Mike, thank you. Pleasure is good, right? Troy, thank you for your gracious commentary...so glad you enjoyed this piece! ~ Claire |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Claire, More and more I am reminded by you of the very reason I am intrigued by the beauty of words. Thank you dear poet for providing me such a beautiful picture... Chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
And I thought this one "Queries" was going to be a poem about submitting to publishers  Nicely done |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is very beautiful, Claire! Very nice! Denise |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Claire, here you epitomize the reason I miss this place whenever I have to be away for a while. You are a cinnamon breath of fresh air which tenderly caresses my sould with each word I drink in. Bless you for your gift and bless you for sharing it. Chris |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Claire - I believe you have a purely magical way of writing - I have a question - do you ever write much freeverse, for you would be excellent at it (No - I am not trying to get a convert everyone!) This is an exceptional poem. K |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Chris...and thank "you" for the thoughtful comment. It thrills me that you were able to find beauty in my words. Ruth...thank you! The publishers will have to keep waiting for me, I suppose, although I did get a note today from "Poetic Voices" that they want one of my pieces for the April Issue. Denise...you seem to always find time to read the poems I post here, and I thank you, sincerely for that. Glad you liked this one. Christopher...how could I not share my meager verses with the likes of fine poets such as you and everyone here? It is in the sharing of our verse that I discover so much pleasure and peace. Thank you, in earnest, for your poetic response, and for letting me know that you enjoyed this. Severn...I don't write nearly as much freeverse as rhyme, but I have posted a few here. Thank you for reading, for offering your kind response and for your generous encouragement! ~ Claire |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Meadowmuse, you write beautifully oh how I melted with your words. these lines.... am born of your words, though I've tried to resist but to sentiment cannot be hidden. I have questioned with senses alive in your eyes. Still, to taste you my lips are forbidden. .... WOW!! Excellent!! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Dark Angel, I'm so glad you liked this. Thank you for reading and letting me know. ~ Claire |
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Zelda Junior Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 43NOVA |
Marvelous, Claire! Z |
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tickle tickle New Member
since 2000-04-03
Posts 7 |
you have put into words the struggle i felt in my heart.... very powerful but thats what it is all about thank you for sharing this poem.. |
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