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Ode to my love
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Ode to my love |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Hi!! I needed some resort to vent out feelings which is really pushing me to bouts of depression and I'm amazed by this haven in internet. Help me guyz as this is my second poem....I can't write the first one without my lover's consent. It's a lovely place. ODE TO MY Love I'm in love with u dear I'd like to be with you always near When are you going to understand And say exacly where we stand Have you ever been clear with your feeling Have u ever come out with your ailing Understand,I'm not the one who caused your falling How can I do that being so loving When everyone said u're not a not a person to be trusted I felt, I should get everyone busted Whenever you told about your dreams I wanted to be a small part of it by all means I know you love me dear and want me to be near So please hear without any fear.. I know you dislike me to the max When you feel I should be stoned to death' do it, Supremax My dear,but my love for you will rise out of the ashes as a phoenix I've tried in every way to make u understand You're the love with whom I always stand You beat me, cheat me, bleed me to death, stoning Every night u'll hear a moaning Which will be the mourning for me and my love Which would have died though as fresh as a white dove I hold you in such high esteem I always think we'll form a very good team But history repeats..... I repeat my love to you You never care and you'll never dare But dear, I'll always be near You should never fear Lord is always here For everything you find it hard to bear Nothing is lost when u love someone If they don't respond to your emotion It doesn't mean that they have no love notion For love doesn't require a celebration It requires silent appreciation I've hurt some on my way here But I've never hurt you dear It was my silent fear They prevented me from being clear You say I can count on you as a friend As you think I'm a disguised fiend Have u ever tried to make urself clear Maybe, its the fate of your star I'll always say to myself I've not deserved your love Though when you ask yourself its truer the other way As I said I'm emmotional, Emma I've never been in an emotional dilemma I've pretended to be stonehearted in the past Pains that hurt me were so vast You think I'm dishonest It's 'coz you never dared or cared to trust Hiding yourself is dishonest So come out with your trust I know u've felt the pain every bit in the past Please realize,I went through it more aghast I'm not a sinner or a winner I'm just a sincere lover or a weaver.. Weaving dreams of you and me as a single body and mind, For which you're a totally blind.. It's not going to be my call again I'd have caught my next train I'd have left you in pain Our love ending up in vain I'm going to take a break I'm letting it to yourself to be awake And see how my hearts quake Its a transperent lake and not a fake If not on earth, Let our soul meet in heaven As in earth, I'm just a busted goal and love-bitten Please forgive me for saying all these If your love was just a tease Or your way to please I'm going far away from you even farther from where I'm.. I'd like to gain strength to build a new friendship... To explore more.. To smile as I've forgotten it for a while.. To see every relationship is honest rain from heaven... To be free from guilt... Which you've biult.. When I love someone again, It'll be just not a lean on others' shoulders It'll be a trust strong enough to displace mighty boulders.. Of 'mistrust' and replacing it with 'musttrust' Which you can never understand as u'll never trust I'm going Emma... Its upto you now to find me.. I've given myself to you long ago.. I've always lived upto your expectations of person But u thought me only as an arson.. It's true in a way, as I'm in a self made prison.. Saying everytime I'll not let anyother person.. To replace my prized possesion.. Please don't you mistake it for obsession.... Flying fish never stays in air all the time.. It returns to water when the bells chime.. I was a flying fish one.. I had to be to see the world above.. I was just peeping to see where we can fit in with peace.. As I don't want it to be a temporary lease.. See you and have a nice time... Ask yourself, if u have sometime... Please ask yourself and the people around if you fail to see.. The happiness I have felt just seeing you.. Sincerely Amazon_lover (A true lover) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family! Please check your email for a special welcome. I see you have lots of emotion in your work, it's nice to be able to express them isn't it? I look forward to reading more from you. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"replace mistrust with musttrust..." very nice... tho' I do disagree a bit...silent love? naw... CELEBRATE!!! make a joyful noise! (but people tell me i'm a bit naughty too...) Welcome! I enjoyed the read! |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Thanks Serenity! I'm just a beginner so ur suggestions are welcome |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
That was a lovely piece. It was very emotional. I enjoyed it very m uch and look forward to reading much more from you! "It is in our aloneness that we recognize our oneness, even as the single droplet of water knows also that it is the sea."Daniel *Cassie Roseen* |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Welcome to Passions, Amazon_Lover. There are plent of good poets here who enjoy helping us improve. INclan |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Oh...I forget...don't go...Emma loves you. I'm sure of that... |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Thanks once again!!!!! I'll write a few more but this with the optimism of finding Emma as she was with all faith. I'm going to wait for her. THANKS A_L |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
welcome to passions, amazon_lover! We're very gald to have you here, and hope you will stay around a long time! And I love the strength and the imagery in your poem. Great Work!  ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi amazon_lover, Very nice, look forword to more of your work. Welcome to passions Cerenity |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Thanks cerenity! Your poems are full of strength and life in it. Great ! A_L |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Welcome to passions  |
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