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pmc
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since 2000-03-09
Posts 48
Germany

0 posted 2000-04-09 03:40 PM


Waiting

I lie here and wait on a hospital trolley,
Wards are all full, I don't have a bed,
Been here all day, no one will hurry
For one who is old, and soon will be dead.

Yet I remember a time,
With a war to be fought,
When they needed me then,
The waiting was short.

But now I am old,
My life almost gone,
So I lie in the cold,
And the waiting is long.


"It could be you"

"It could be you" That's all I see
as I place my hope on the lottery.
To spend what I can ill afford,
on the tiny chance of a big reward.
Then home I go to dream a lot
as the cats get fat in Camelot.
but I've only ever won Ten Pounds
as I watch the balls go round and round.

And every week a millionaire  
and just a little charity.
enough to let us know they care.
A question of morality.


Farewell to Falcarragh

A little boy,
Hiding in the garden of a cottage,
Scarred,
Crowds of people,
A man standing on a chair holding things,
A red tricycle,
All that was his,
Sold,
Life was never the same again.


P.J. McFadden  


© Copyright 2000 Patrick McFadden - All Rights Reserved
Mike
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since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462

1 posted 2000-04-09 03:54 PM


Almost didn't read your poems as I envisioned three nonsensical rhymes.  Glad I did.  I don't know if I would refer to these fine works as three short poems, because what they say speak volumes.  Well done.
Wicked Witch of the East
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since 1999-11-09
Posts 69

2 posted 2000-04-09 09:22 PM


Well written, I particularly liked the third in your trilogy...
WhiteNite
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since 2000-04-09
Posts 241
Montgomery, AL
3 posted 2000-04-09 09:50 PM


I really like that first one... it reminds me of my dad.  He is out of work and he keeps telling me, "Son... you better get yourself ina  good position for retiurement now because when you get old like me nobody will want you to work for them..."

=)

Great work.

 "We always said it would be good to go away, someday,
but if there's nothing there to make things change,
if it's the same to you I'll just hang."
--Matchbox20 (Hang)

pmc
Junior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 48
Germany
4 posted 2000-04-10 10:03 AM


Thank you all.
The first two poems were written from observation.
The third from experience

pmc

dhuron
Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476

5 posted 2000-04-10 10:10 AM


Great Job.  I liked the first one the best, holds a valid truth often overlooked.

 The glory of friendship is not the outstretched hand, not the kindly smile, not the joy of companionship; it is the spiritual inspiration that comes to one when he discovers that someone believes in him and is willing to trust him with his friendship."

--Ralph Waldo Emerson


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