Open Poetry #6 |
In the Mirror |
kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
In the Mirror She once was full of laughter and full of grace She now only stares into a solemn face. She looks in the mirror and what does she see A shell of a woman who used to be. Like a broken dam, memories flood her mind Of younger years how life was kind. Of the love that was real and oh so true Her colorful world is now only blue. Through the turnstile he walked it was time to go He turned to her and said this you must know I love you my darling, and please do not fear. Hold me close in your heart,then I’ll always be near Duty had called him to a land far away By that turnstile she waits day after day for the man who was to make her his wife She has lived a lonely, dark bitter life. Dreams that they made with young love afire The life they would live full of desire. But that dream was lost, it shattered apart The day that he left, it broke her heart. She once was full of laughter and full of grace She now only stares into a solemn face. She looks in the mirror and what does she see A shell of a woman who used to be. -------------- You got to get up every morning with a smile on your face and show the world all the love in your heart Then people are gonna treat you better You're gonna find, yes you will That your beautiful as you feel.~~~ Carol King |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Kitkat...this is SO sadly beautiful... so very well written and expressed... perfect rhyme flow... this reminded me of the story my grandmother told me of when grandpa went of to war. very nice work on this piece great to have a poem from ya take care,jm The stars shine so bright, now's the time I close my eyes - soft wind touch my face, Cool sand upon the place where I once kissed you And held you close. Now I will reach for the stars... Because Oh my love, that's where you are... Though the storms of black night rage on I still see your face I still feel your lips on mine And though my heart feels all alone without you I still hear you sing to me I still hear your voice on the sea... vertical horizon |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Well written poem, flowed wonderfully with good emotion. I liked muchly. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Sadly beautiful , Kitkat ... Excellent writing here ..... "Shoot for the moon.Even if you miss,you'll land among the stars." _Les Brown_ |
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weaubleau Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 101MO |
very sad. very nice. great writing. you captured the situation beautifully. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Yes, such wonderful, emotive writing! ~ Claire |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Yes... I just had to find out where Delta Dawn ended up. Nice work kit, I guess she still at the station. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
KitKat~ So emotional the parting that you tell. Beautifully done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
And years later, did she stop looking in the mirror, until she nearly forgot who she used to be, only a vapor in the wind of the memories carefully preserved in her soul? This poem evokes many personal feelings in me. It is very special. A tear-jerking experience. Too real for any casual reading. Thank you for such a gift. |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Thank you all for such nice comments. I fear I am not a very good replier to all of yours. I do read almost everthing here though. What a great bunch of poets you all are. |
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