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Path of Sorrow
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Path of Sorrow |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
As I walked to school I kept my eyes to the ground I saw no reason to look up In my sorrows I drowned Day after day I did the same Following the same sad path I kept to my own little world One forged of bitterness and wrath That path was one of sorrow One I learned quite well I kept note of every step That led me to my hell A step here, my father Who beat me when I was bad Another step, my mother Who aspired to make me mad But this path paved in anger Led me to a graver fate To school with my peers Who taught me how to hate Once in awhile I would look up And be blinded by the light I decided to stick to my path With all the normal sights One day I got sick of it all And decided to look around I saw a whole other world Just waiting to be found Again I apologize for not being around lately, this is the first serious poem I have written in over a week  Im sorry I havent been replying a lot either, free time has become a luxury I can't afford. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Never apologize for life. This is pretty good..I'm seeing a transition in your work.. Take your time...we'll be here the next time you have a chance to write.  |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
If anyone can relate to the free time thing Travis, I can. I have been on line 3 times in the last 2 weeks. Mostly I check and reply to my mail, IF I have the time. I am not sure if anyone remembers me anymore...lol. Glad to see you have found a brighter path my friend. ((hug)) |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
You know, you're right, this is a serious poem, but the way you've chosen to bring around the ending speaks to me as more of a beginning, and I LIKE that! Good writing, my friend.  ~ Claire |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I like the hopeful ending, Mistik. Good to see you again... |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
God how I can relate. I know exactly what you felt like. Wonderful piece |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mystik~ So glad to see that you are 'looking around'. Take care and come on here and visit anytime you've got the time. I'm wishing good, good things for you. Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Ouch, me luv. I remember walking this path...and how lonely and painful it is... and yes, you brought me back, you poet, you! luv to you... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Spring and a new beginning. What a great combination Best wishes Liz |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Mistik, this is a wonderful poem that I can relate to. I'll be glad to wait awhile for the next beautiful piece! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Poet deVine- Thanks, and yea, I noticed that too, my poems seem to have more optimistic endings, dunno whats wrong with me Marilyn- Thanks, and for me I have been able to get on each day, but it has been in 10 minute spurts Meadowmuse- Thanks I was aiming for that, I am glad it worked out as well as it did Balladeer- Yea, its good to be back, even if for such a short time One Who Understands- Thanks Marge Tindal- Thanks, and I shall do my best to show up as often as possible, but I am not promising anything... serenity- Thank you Elizabeth Santos- heh, thanks, but I didnt even think of linking this poem to the season, heh, it just decided to come out right now LoveBug- Why thank you, and I will try not to make you wait too long |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I like the hope and the ending too! Very good! Denise |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
yuh an outlet for dismal thinkin is good here we are write dark dark till yuh cant no more than try writin bout a butterfly and you'll be all better...good poem yuh |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Denise & Walt- Danke I dunno about that butterfly walt, but I shall try to write more dark poetry |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I too liked the ending man. I know, coming from me that sounds wierd, but hey.. that's me! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
There's nothing wrong with having an optimistic outlook! I'm really glad to see it I'm glad you're looking around and noticing light. Look forward to the next time you can pop in and see us You take of you!<*\\\>< YOUR LIFE IS NOT A COINCIDENCE. IT'S A REFLECTION OF YOU! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Well you found that "whole other world" much earlier than I did, my friend. Took me some 30 years. I can still remember it coming into view, though. Like wiping cobwebs from the eyes and feeling the sun for the first time. You've taken me back to a wonderful moment. Thank you. Michael |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Christopher- why would it be wierd? did I miss something? Thanks anyway  WhtDove- Thanks I shall try to be around more, but Im not promising anything Michael- It makes my happy to hear that I could help you relive such an enlightening moment in your life. Thanks for giving me the opportunity |
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