Open Poetry #6 |
dear mother, |
weaubleau Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 101MO |
dear mother, i'm writing this in the form of a poem, because it's how i speak from the heart, there's something i've been meaning to tell you, but i didn't know where to start... i've told you about kenna before, but i never said enough, i didn't really want to say what i felt, i was trying to be "tough". you see, after i lost amy, nothing seemed worthwhile. i'd try and try every day, but i could barely seem to smile. i swore to myself when that all ended, i'd keep my feelings inside... i'd date a girl only until she went for my heart then that's when i'd push her aside. the truth is mom, i've just been afraid, of seeing my heart break again, i've been running away from love, so that my heart wouldn't let someone in. i can't explain how it happened, maybe only by fate or chance, but that wall i'd built around my heart crumbled with only a glance. it only took one day for me to realize how special she is. and if it wasn't love at first sight, i have no idea what this is... kenna is everything i've ever wanted, and all i'll ever need, i'd take her in my arms, and hold her forever, if only she'd follow my lead. i wish i could tell you exactly what i'm feeling, but i'm sure you already know... just think about what you were feeling for my father, 25 years ago. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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This is wonderful Weaubleau! Straight from the heart!! Denise |
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weaubleau Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 101MO |
thanks denise |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Weaubleau - so what did your mom say when she saw this lovely piece...and did it bring back wonderful memories for her? Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I can't think of a better way to tell your mom |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
This was so beautiful touching! I'm sure your Mom understands...and Kenya is a lucky girl. You all are lucky in fact! Wish you lots of love and happiness. Take care, AMY ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
wow this is great...very well expressed emotions and perfect rhyme flow...very smooth. you and i seem to write kinda the same style...from what i see in this one (not that I have a clue what my "style" is) (smile)... anyway....this is very good...and welcome to Passions...the perfect place for love at first sight! take care, jm The stars shine so bright, now's the time I close my eyes - soft wind touch my face, Cool sand upon the place where I once kissed you And held you close. Now I will reach for the stars... Because Oh my love, that's where you are... Though the storms of black night rage on I still see your face I still feel your lips on mine And though my heart feels all alone without you I still hear you sing to me I still hear your voice on the sea... vertical horizon |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Weaubleau~ A very nice poem from your heart. That's the best way to write ... at least that's what I think. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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weaubleau Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 101MO |
sorry it took so long to reply...been pretty busy. sunshine-this was my mom's reply to it "(son), i know you haven't been looking for love, but maybe it has found you. it sounds like you care for this girl an awful lot. i would tell you to be sure that she is right for you before you jump in, but it sounds like it's too late. i trust you know what you have and i know you'll do the right thing. if she is this right for you, don't let her get away. all the miles between you don't matter...just don't let her get away." thank you all for the wonderful comments |
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