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When one and one make one
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When one and one make one |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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there is a part of you connected to a part of me and together we made a whole that was just perfect not too full of me... for to make room for you I had to let a bit of me go my selfishness, my pride and my always have it my way and my quick temper too, that had to go. and its not too full of you... cause to add yourself to me you had to let go of a little a little machisimo your tough, manly attitude, your look out for only number one and your impatience, for sure that needed to go for now there is one... instead of two. but the years have taken a toll, that I fear is too great to surmount. I never felt myself leave but there is now less of me less of my self respect and certainly less of who I used to be, and much less respect for the man you turned out to be there is less of your kindness and less of your want to take care of me less of your smile less of mine and now I just feel a sadness for the one that used to be two. [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 04-06-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
"but the years have taken a toll, that I fear is too great to surmount. I never felt myself leave but there is certainly now less of me less of my self respect and certainly less of who I used to be, and much less respect for the man you turned out to be there is less of your kindness and less of your want to take care of me and less of your smile and mine and now I just feel a sadness for the one that used to be two. ----------------------- corazon, I think I knew what this one was about when I saw the title...this poem speaks of my heart like I could have wrote it...how did you know(smile)... deeply honest and personal, painful and real... I understand. very moving poem...very well expressed... some times less is more...but never when speaking matters of the heart... there comes a time when we all get tired of settling for less...I know we all deserve more... take care, jm The stars shine so bright, now's the time I close my eyes - soft wind touch my face, Cool sand upon the place where I once kissed you And held you close. Now I will reach for the stars... Because Oh my love, that's where you are... Though the storms of black night rage on I still see your face I still feel your lips on mine And though my heart feels all alone without you I still hear you sing to me I still hear your voice on the sea... vertical horizon |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is so sad yet beautifully written Corazon. Very well written and expressed! Denise |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Beautiful poem, Corazon... but aching with sadness for lost dreams. *S* |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
Janet Marie, Denise, Ruth, thank you much, and yep I know sad....sigh...at least my crazy life brings out good poems  |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Carazon, This is what I have been looking for, for a long time. I needed a understanding of what happend to the us and your poem said it all. Thank you so much, Cerenity |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corazon, Good thoughts, good words, good poem. Enjoyed the read. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Good writing Corazon...the relationship I am trying to end and resolve right now was similar in some ways...I feel like the foundation of a relationship is admiration and trust. In retrospect I feel like my exwife never admired me yet I always admired her...however at this time there is nothing about her I admire and the things she has done have taken away all my trust...so there is nothing left. James |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Your words always speak so loudly to me, we are as mirror images at times. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corazon~ Lovely thoughts created here. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
I'm still trying to figure out how 1 & 1 = 9 |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
expressed beautifully Corazon and yes, very sad .... true for too many ..... "Shoot for the moon.Even if you miss,you'll land among the stars." _Les Brown_ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
This is indeed sad, but written so gently. A study in bitter realism. Thank you. ~ Claire |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Corazon--From the heart, though sad and bleeding...you are still whole. Well written poem and hugs! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
The way you have woven these thoughts into this poem makes it the best thing I've seen you do. This is masterful, corazon....you should change your name to Phoenix  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
tears here, I can so relate to this pain you captured so well. good job |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Life does tend to suck when numbers melt away hun...you keep looking out for number one...and smile a purdy smile for lil ole D!!! Love you girl!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
Great Poem, I can relate to it as well*sigh* Perhaps in time, the feeling will melt away The glory of friendship is not the outstretched hand, not the kindly smile, not the joy of companionship; it is the spiritual inspiration that comes to one when he discovers that someone believes in him and is willing to trust him with his friendship." --Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sad quivers went through my spine as I read this superb verse. You have written the sorrow beautifully Excellent poem, though heart wrenching Liz |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow, all, I thank you from my heart, I never expected to come back today to so many kind loving responses....hugs to all |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Corazon, Nice to see you out and about yet. And I hope with time, the writing of these themed poems will help lay your feeling of loss to rest. If anything, you're discovering what you need to discover now -- and you know it's never to late to change. Mike |
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