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Fairytale, part 1
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Fairytale, part 1 |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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FAIRYTALE, part 1 The other side of sanity, I stood before the throne. Just looking upon Vanity, Condemned to life - alone! Lifeless eyes shaded to pale blue, He bore a plastic crown. A jester's joke rung ever true, Demeanor of the clown! The diadem, a silhouette Of hope pointed on high. By the addiction of roulette, A Monarch can't deny. He spins the wheel, the kingdom falls, Now stood to disarray. Nobody wins within the walls Of self-righteous decay. The past rules now, upon dark horse, Poison scepter there claimed. Unto the joust holding discourse, Till honor is defamed. By passion bled, by crumbled hope, Nay, lightning's silver wing. We count the dead but not the scope Held to a fallen king. By gauntlets shed, by swords laid bare To battlefields of ghosts. Stand we, tempted beyond all care To share our maddened boasts! The toast, herein, to anarchy, For all cherished now dies. Kingdom, therein, of Fallacy, Love's fairytale, but lies. Michael Anderson For all behind was dark and drear, And all before was night and fear. How many hours of night or day In those suspended pangs I lay, I could not tell; I scarcely knew If this were human breath I drew. Lord Byron |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Fairy tales don't always have a happy ending... Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
This is very cool, my friend. I'm still quite stunned that you wrote this in minutes! I look forward to seeing part 2. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Sir Michael: A most excellent read... glad I didn't pass it up. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
A rather dark fairie tale, but I enjoyed reading it. Now on to part two! Liz |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
"but lies- or lies????" Loved that last line...reads good both ways!!! Ending happily depends on two babe...therein, there is no lie...  Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I like it, and the first stanza best of all...  |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wonderful....  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Lovely job Michael  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent writing, Michael!! Denise |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Michael- I agree with Elizabeth, not all fairytales end with "happily ever after". I truly enjoyed reading the darkness. Thank you, and now I'm going to check out part II. This was very good, my friend! AMY ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I too am over to check out part 2 after this, my friend! Truly exellent work...I like the darkness woven into such fantasy. Great work! *Krista Knutson* As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins. ~*Albert Schweitzer*~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Michael~ Wonderful, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Elizabeth, Indeed, happy endings aren't always in the works, but this story is far from over... Satiate, glad you enjoyed this part - I have decided to take your advice and run this into an Epic... I hope I can hold the passion through out the entire piece. Andrew, glad you caught it too. devina, I will let each reader draw their own conclusion there... you are very perceptive of my intentions though, dear. nan, that's just because you know I live on the other side of sanity, huh? Amy, glad you enjoyed the Dark tour... there will be some light visible soon though, promise. Alwye, dark woven reality creates a fantasy all her own me thinks. Glad you enjoyed. Thank you all for the kind replies. Michael |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is wonderful Michael on my way to read part 2.What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
nicely done, and yep some fairytales make you cry ... |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Michael, your work is impeccable. No matter what you write about. On to part #2. |
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