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I've been B-booged
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I've been B-booged |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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I’ve been B-booged As one who in poetry often immerses I opened the forum, and read a few verses Martie’s is really the height of perfection And certainly doesn’t need any correction But low and behold, there was a response From Mr B-boog in his cool nonchalance He said Martie let me give my response By suggesting some words with a different nuance Now Margie and I got a little unglued That Martie’s magnificent verse was B-booged So I wrote him a letter and said Mr Boog I believe that you may be a little confooged I said we don’t criticize on Forum six Is not like CA and it’s not in betwixt I said Martie’s poems are the tip of the top The peak of perfection , the cream of the crop And he wrote me an e-mail, so perfectly nice A gentleman’s note laced with manners and spice He said now critiquing does not bother me ‘Cause I look for improving on my poetry Then I went to CA and I posted a few It’s a place where piranha jaws cut you in two Now CA is a forum, and there’s no mystique Where poets expect a quite thorough critique B-boog read my poem and he started right in Please let’s change the title, he said with a grin And I have another exciting proposal Let’s throw the first verse down the garbage disposal But then he took time to explain things to me About some mistakes that I never did see And I learned quite a bit through B-boog's good advice Of ways I could make rhyming verses concise Don’t let B-boog’s comments intimidate yoog It’s sincere and quite valid from his point of vieoog Don’t let his critiquing be so misconstrooged If he thinks that your verses may well be improoged I think I’ve been inflooenced more than I shooog Perhaps I have been a bit over b-booged But too tell yoo the trooth, I like Boog a lot He’s one of the troothfulest friends that I’ve got So Mr. B-boog, this verse is for yoog Twoo words that are proobably well overdoog I “thank yoo” for helping me so to improog Best wishes and please have a very goog doog Best Regards, bboog Liz |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Elizabeth: I truly don't think you needed any improvement... and I'll hold steadfast that most of us who avoid CA like the proverbial plague don't care for unsolicited critiques. *S* But this poem is a delight. *S* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
LIZ this is CHARMING!!!!!! absolutly adorable...I'm laughing so hard I cant type...I think it shows such class on your part...we all saw BB critiques and werent sure what to make of them here in the land of kind replies..but as you say in this witty poem...we are never to accomplished to learn... this was great truly thanks for the lesson Liz and BBoog lol jm ...when you walked into the room, I saw their faces, you made it feel like time was standing still...and I felt fascination... then you turned and smiled in my direction... and my heart...gave me away. glass tiger |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Now that's what I call some serious poetic license... Good tribute to your friend, Liz. I am glad he's found CA to his liking also. Michael |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
suthern, I know how you feel, most of us don't like unsolicited critiquing, but bboog has got the gist of the forums and has found a great home CA, where I have come to respect so many poets who post there. And he is a really nice guy. Thanks, you are sweet and your comments very kind P.S. I owe you a poem but am having trouble finding it. But I will send it Love ya Liz Janet Marie, Thank you for laughing, which I like to do myself, especially at situations. Michael, Poetic license has no limitations in the mind of the poet. Thanks |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Liz, you're fresher than a booganvilla, slipperier than a taboogan, more eloquent than Humphrey Boogart and stealthier than the boogeyman. In other words, you're a cute little booger!  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Could not say it better then Balladeer. Enjoyed the poem. Love Sy |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
My sentiments exactly, Elizabeth! He is a sweetie pie! Denise |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Liz, Well if I ever get my tong untied I would say that the typing alone on this one was a lesson in its self. You are loving to the core my lady. Cerenity |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
chuckling here... thanks for the smile. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Liz...this was just adorable.  |
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Tom Sawyer New Member
since 2000-04-04
Posts 9 |
This was hilarious... I'm new here, so I don't know any of the personalities involved, but I feel like I do after reading this. Glad you could be so kind to your critic, and glad to know he's kind underneath. I'm no poet, so I hope I don't get B-Booged any time soon, but if I do, it's good to know it's constructive criticism. (This was also the best piece of poetry I've read tonight, btw.) (Mental note to self: STAY OUT OF CA) [This message has been edited by Tom Sawyer (edited 04-05-2000).] |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
Liz, Flattery will get you everywhere. I really enjoyed your bbooged poem and also your response to my April fool's joke. As I mentioned to you in an e-mail, I'm pretty thick-skinned (or thick-headed) when it comes to criticism and try to remember that others may not be so. I do try to keep my critiques to the work itself, not the person. Perhaps you should know one of the reasons for me being so quick and dirty with the poems I read/review. It has to do with my wife.(I know, blame it on the wife.) To be honest though, she hates it when I write. Even after publishing two books now. She calls writing "my bad habit". (I make good money in my business and she wants me to only concentrate on that.) Note: I've been married now for 14 years and she hasn't stopped me from writing or critiquing, it's just something I've learned to live with. She really hopes that I'll fall flat on my face with my new book of fiction, Extreme Urgency, which is due to be released pretty soon. And I'm afraid she could be right on this one. So that's the way it is. Usually I try to read, review and write fairly quickly, so if my posts come off as being abrupt, brusque or too direct- they probably are. Also, I am NOT a perfect speller, but if I notice that you've got a typo in your poems, I'll point it out. (And I'll gladly delete the comment later after it's fixed so nobody will know.) Hopefully you'll return the favor to me. So to any and all of you who have been bbooged, I have this to say to you, "I pity you!". Oh, and by the way, the critical analysis section is not that bad of a place to post a poem or two. (There you can ALSO freely critique/bash/smash/rave/love/hate one of my gilded "masterpieces". While you're there, you'll probably find a warm cup of metaphor tea and a couple of critiques to crunch on. Just remember to duck if a dart is thrown at you. Again, thank you Liz for your warm-hearted poem. I really enjoyed it. And I also loved your "Letter to Your Granddaughter" poem. Didn't get a chance to say so. best regards, bboog [This message has been edited by bboog (edited 04-05-2000).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Superbly doone, Lizzy loove. CA is a great place and teaches how to improve your work - I personally feel it is essential for any serious writer to reach the point where they can be critiqued by others - cause that's what editors are gonna do! But if that isn't where a writer is at then we should have a place to post our work in safety - away from the 'meanies' in CA! Hehe - including me! And, that is why I love Open 6... Well done Lizzy - good stuff! And Bboog - ~giving bows at books being published~ I may become a disciple! 'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
well nice poem Liz, you go get him. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Balladeer, First time I was ever described as such. But I'll take any compliment I can get, I think. Sy, Speak for thyself. Love ya Denise. Glad you agree. Thanks Cerenity, Typing is not my forte, nor is spelling. Thanks, dear Mike, Glad you enjoyed Wht Dove, Thank you Tom Sawyer, Watch out for the big, bad Boog bboog, Well you said it better than I can. No footnote needed here, exept the Guatamalan wife you speak of is lovely. I saw her picture on your site. Kamla, I agree, Open Six is not for critquing. Hear that, Boog? Thanks dear for your comments Haleya, Last but not least, Thanks for reading my silliness Liz |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Elizabeth's a booger???? LOL... Don't know about that, but I sure did enjoy this poem....  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sunshine here, dancing fast to catch up with y'all - and Liz, you've done a marvelous job of introducing some of us who have been away awhile into the intricacies of Mr. B-boog. Someone to watch out for, and to watch for! Marvelous job! Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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