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For Tonight |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Author's Note: This is a poem of unrequited love that I wrote several years ago. Hope you like it! For Tonight For tonight, make believe that you love me; Oh, I know that it isn't true! But, the weight of the world is upon me, And I need you to help me pull through. Just give me your hand to hold onto, And let me gaze into your eyes. Then, tell me you'll love me, forever; And, tonight, I'll believe all these lies. The sky is o'ershadowed with darkness, And the bright moon is hidden from sight. But, I know I can make it 'til morning, If I think that you love me, tonight. -Troy J. Hoecherl- © Troy J Hoecherl All Rights Reserved Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Troy~ Well, I don't know about last night ... but I LOVE THIS POEM THIS MORNING !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi hsystems, This is so good, I know how this feels and you put it in to words so perfectly. Thank you, Cerenity |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Like it?? I love it...this is beautiful Troy |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Marge...thanks so much - glad you enjoyed it!  Cerenity...thanks! I never did end up with the lady who is the subject of the poem. Had to settle for being good friends. But, you know what? It turned out to be one of the best friendships I have ever had! Hoot...glad you enjoyed it! Writing this poem helped me to ease the heartache a bit, and also helped me to realize that I couldn't change her - only myself. I appreciate all of your wonderful comments! Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is absolutely wonderful, Troy! I think some of the best poems come out of the pain we experience. Denise |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
For tonight, make believe that you love me; Oh, I know that it isn't true! But, the weight of the world is upon me, And I need you to help me pull through. --------- this is great...I reallty enjoyed its flow...it read smooth and even kinda like song lyrics...this isone you could just hear set to music. your emootions in it are sensitve and nicely expressed as well. take care, jm ...when you walked into the room, I saw their faces, you made it feel like time was standing still...and I felt fascination... then you turned and smiled in my direction... and my heart...gave me away. glass tiger |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Excellent verse, Troy. I can truly relate to just needing to hear those words for just one night. beautifully done. Michael |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is a wonderful poem, and excellent verses. I loved it Liz |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Troy, this is so exquisite. Thanks for sharing - I hope you never have to go through this again. Teresa King www.tipsfortop.com |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Simply stated and sincere...this is very nice, Troy. ~ Claire |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Denise - I agree! Somebody once said that the best art comes from suffering. I don't think that it's necessarily that sorrow is more poetic than joy - the emotions are just often so much more intense... Janet Marie - your kind words are music to my ears, my talented friend! Michael - thanks! I think we have all "been there, done that" at one time or another. Hearts are funny things, and they don't always "connect" the way we'd like them to... Liz - (giving the full courtly bow) Thank you, M'Lady! Teresa - praise from Caesar! You have quite a gift yourself, Young Lady! Claire - well, we could certainly form a Mutual Admiration Society. I really enjoy reading your poetry! Thank you all for your kind words and your caring hearts. You guys are the best! Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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SorrowsMystress Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 178I'm a wanderer, a nomad...I don't live in one particular area, Just wherever I end up. |
Boy oh boy! Looks like the way I've been trying to express myself for years! I loved it. One night of love is better than none at all, eh? Although I WOULD prefer an everlasting love to anything ***Sigh**** Maybe someday, right? hehehe. Great work...It was absolutely marvolous! "It was my love that did us both to death. " -Sylvia Plath |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Better to love and lose than to never love at all even if we lose it all the ride is worth the fall nicely done Jeffrey |
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Stormy Weather New Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 3Wilmington, CA, USA |
I love this poem I think it's so beautiful. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I like it... If we can just get through tonight - Tomorrow just seems so much easier, doesn't it??.. So - Did she??..  |
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Lady Web Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 96Houston, Texas |
Oh my this is so great. For believe everyone has had one or two of these nights before. I enjoyed this one very much. |
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