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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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spark spark spark breaker flipped again the system can only take so much I turn off all not essential to breathing to living and slowly inward I go to find the problem one circuit at a time eliminating the stress checking for errors in logic faulty reasoning has taken its toll frayed circuits discarded patched and replaced there maybe this time no same reaction same spark spark same flip out of reality but now the night is tired clutched covers eye level and above wait for the morn to shed light anew [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 04-03-2000).] |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
Unique poem...I like the comparisons you draw here..nice writing! |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks cheryl....  |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
this gave me a real voltage of emotion, such a lovely spark it was, let their be light. If it was only that simple. Parker |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corazon~ NOW I know what they mean when they say I've 'flipped out'. This was very unique. Let's send it back to the top for a re-charge ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Hey, great thoughts, Corazon. I love these comparisons. Sounds like there was a short somewhere!!! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I'm with Marge on that re-charge! Back to the top with this! Superb! Thanks... |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I can relate to those blown circuits right now dear...care to join me with the battery pack???  You hang in there girl...got yours in the mail fed-ex style!!! Love you ~D Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
love all the "electric" comments *g* you guys are too cute...and oh so nice to me too *s*.... thank you to you all [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 04-04-2000).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I absolutely love this, especially the positive note on the ending...and you my dear friend already shine |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
When you turn off all not essential to breathing, you turn out a helluva poem! *S* Great job... (I always knew you were sizzling. *EG*) |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thank you both of you ruth's you two mean much to me |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Corazon, you amaze me. You always come up with metaphors that I would've never thought of. |
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JTF Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 319France |
Corazon, are you telling us you're a techie girl ? ...  ... Nice spark ! |
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