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It's still too early...
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It's still too early... |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA 
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*The last line is in Russian, it literally means, "It's still to early, It's still to early..." and ofcourse it rhymes with stretcher. The blaring gusts no longer come to soothe, The wind and I no longer share one course! The law of motion says that one can’t move, Unless he’s acted on by certain force. The winds blow by my ship with no effect-- They only pass right through the ripped up sail. From boredom, I recall, in retrospect, The days when I would ride upon the gale, -- The days when rats were jumping overboard, When lighting struck, so viciously and surly, When out of might and strength, I often thought, “It’s still too early, it’s still too early!” I spin the rudder in despair, both night and day, But the predestined plot’s proceeding And motionless, my ship will only sway Upon the waves, -- forthcoming and receding. I’ve lost my track on this deceiving trek. I’m out of breath, the blurry mist I swallow! The rain won’t cease; it pounds on the deck, -- Not everything that’s from above is hallow. But I refuse to scream out, “S-O-S!” I will not leave my ship upon a stretcher My lucky stars continue to suggest, -- *“Åøå íå âå÷åð, åøå íå âå÷åð...” |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
AWESOME. Thank you again and again, Mighty Master! Continue my education, please.... |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
I loved this poem, it teaches an important lesson about never giving up. Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Your talents cease to amaze me my young friend...I only hope I am around to see your work when you are in your 40's or 50's, with what you do now, it's going to be awesome  |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you everyone, Ruth I don't deserve all of your compliments, but I can't wait to see what I'm going to be writing when I get older either. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Don't know much about Russian , but I did enjoy this piece . Na vashe zdrovia .( which probably isn't spelled right , but which I believe to mean " to your health " Doc |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Awesome, Master!! You are so talented!! I too can't wait to see your work when you are older.....the thought is mind boggling! Denise |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Dr. Moose, it's actually "Za vashe zdorovie!" but you're pretty close! Where did you learn that one? Denise, thank you. It means a lot coming from a very talented poet. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Master~ Nice work. I enjoyed. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you Marge! |
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