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SorrowsMystress Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 178I'm a wanderer, a nomad...I don't live in one particular area, Just wherever I end up. 
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Neglect Have you ever reaped The being from the soul And intertwined an echo between your fingertips Escaped a sigh with only seconds left to breathe Let the leaves rip and tear under your feet The feet which kicked my stomach so blindly The feet which walked upon my face Until I was beyond Black and blue A backhanded discipline shot out too far. But how long will you push me before I snap and begin raping your intelligence Stripping you down to your naked fear.... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This seems like a dark picture of physical abuse rather than neglect. I hope it isn't true, but your poem shows a lot of emotion Liz |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Another poem packed full of raw emotions |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SorrowsMyst~ This is very sad and very frightening. Packed with raw emotion ... Unfortunate for such horror to inspire a poem. If it has happened to you .. seek help. If it's happening to someone you know ... seek help. Powerfully written. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Wow! Haunting, bitter, and full of life and truth. Enjoyed much. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Hauntingly dark and sorrowful. Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very powerful piece. If this is happening to you, don't wait 'till you snap. Get out while you can and then get counseling to go on with the rest of your life. And then don't look back. Denise |
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SorrowsMystress Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 178I'm a wanderer, a nomad...I don't live in one particular area, Just wherever I end up. |
Thank you for your concern....this has happened to me, but fortunately I am out of the circumstances which inspired me to write this. I have gotten help for the post trauma it caused, and am doing quite well now. I just have a knack for writing about my atrocities, so I'll warn you now to expect that from me. Thank you for all of your wonderful comments, it gives me great hope.  |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi SorrowsMystress, I am sorry you went through this, life is hard enough to do without this, and I am glad you are ok. I write about my past as well it seems to finalize it, or at least help. This is good. Cerenity |
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Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 197Cincinnati, Oh, U.S.A. |
wow...Wow....WOW |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
Very, very powerful. Good poem |
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