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LoveBug
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0 posted 2000-04-01 05:42 PM


My dear friends
Can you give me some help?
This is a task
That I can't do myself

The day I've dreamed of
And written of, too
Is about to arrive
(No April fool!)

I'm taking charge
Of my own destiny
I just hope that fate
Will be kind to me

The time has arrived
When I will say
What I feel for the guy
That I pine for each day

The guy I write for
Who's always in my mind
And the perfect poem
I'd like to find

This is where you come in
Read through my posts
And find the one
That will work the most

And, so early
This Monday morn
It goes in his locker
Heavily adorned

And, one thing he will surely
Be able to see
It will be MY name
No anonymity

He may say yes
He'll probably say no
But I can't live wondering
I just have to know

Living life for a dream
Isn't how it should be
For once, I'm taking charge
I'm doing this for ME

(So, please help! If you want to, read through my posts to see what poem would tell him what I feel the best, and just tell me the name. If you don't have time to do that, some encouragement would be nice! Thanks!)


 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde

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Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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1 posted 2000-04-01 06:02 PM


ooooh LoveBug, by acknowledging to yourself that now is the time to act - you are already half the way there!  Good Luck and please do let us know how it works out! I will have some good thoughts for you xx

Roniece  

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2 posted 2000-04-01 06:12 PM


Ugh, I have so little free time lately.. I will try and find the time to look through your stuff Lovebug, but dont hate me if I dont   Its good that yer gonna tell him how you feel, just make sure you brace yourself for whatever he may say. I made the mistake of asking a girl out, and wasnt ready for her answer of no, I was utterly destroyed   I do not, however, regret asking her, and you wont either, no matter what the result.
Elizabeth
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3 posted 2000-04-01 06:15 PM


Good luck, Lovebug! I'll look right now, and when I find it I'll bump it up to the top, 'k?

Best wishes, Elizabeth


 "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!"
-The Crucible


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4 posted 2000-04-01 06:21 PM


Why not use this poem? Put an opening verse on it addressed to him and give this to him!
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5 posted 2000-04-01 06:26 PM


this one maybe? today can be that somedaySometimes, I will sit and think
About what I wish I could say
I would scream it out to you
If I only knew the way
The way to overcome the fear
Of saying it to you
I dream of saying it every day
But will this ever come true?

If this dream ever came to be
And I got to say this to you
Here is what I would say
And every word would be true...

“It doesn’t matter what you say
As long as I hear your voice
And I’ll gladly give my life for yours
If I am given the choice

It doesn’t matter if you push me away
Because I’ll be happy to feel your touch
And you can be as mean as you want
I won’t leave; I love you too much

I wish you would say you loved me
Even if it were a lie
Because if you reject me now
I’ll curl up and die”

Yes, I would say this to you
If I ever got the chance
But, I’m just a coward
Stuck in a hopeless romance

So, I still sit and think
About what I wish I could say
Maybe I’ll say it sometime,
Maybe... someday






Elizabeth
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6 posted 2000-04-01 06:26 PM


I found two that you might  consider--Deserving of You, and I can't remember the title of the other one, but they are in Teen Poetry #2 at the top. Good luck again!

Elizabeth


 "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!"
-The Crucible


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7 posted 2000-04-01 06:40 PM




Sprin and love are in the air...best of luck to you, although any guy that can't see that you are a gem is....well he's just plain blind...I'm going poem hunting now  

Elizabeth Santos
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8 posted 2000-04-01 08:23 PM


lovebug,
I finally got teen forum#2 open but cannot access #1. I think either this one or one of the two on page 1 of Teen #2 are perfect. You should really choose. I personally like this one, eliminating two stanzas, the first one and the one beginning, "THis is where you come in".
Good luck, lovebug.
Liz

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9 posted 2000-04-01 10:35 PM


Thank you for the suggestions and support, everyone! I think I'll re-write "Deserving of you" and give it to him, but I'm still open for suggestions!   Thanks again!

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde

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10 posted 2000-04-01 10:59 PM


I think this one works fine, the main thing is that you let your feelings be known. Good luck.
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