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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697
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My dear friends Can you give me some help? This is a task That I can't do myself The day I've dreamed of And written of, too Is about to arrive (No April fool!) I'm taking charge Of my own destiny I just hope that fate Will be kind to me The time has arrived When I will say What I feel for the guy That I pine for each day The guy I write for Who's always in my mind And the perfect poem I'd like to find This is where you come in Read through my posts And find the one That will work the most And, so early This Monday morn It goes in his locker Heavily adorned And, one thing he will surely Be able to see It will be MY name No anonymity He may say yes He'll probably say no But I can't live wondering I just have to know Living life for a dream Isn't how it should be For once, I'm taking charge I'm doing this for ME (So, please help! If you want to, read through my posts to see what poem would tell him what I feel the best, and just tell me the name. If you don't have time to do that, some encouragement would be nice! Thanks!) "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
ooooh LoveBug, by acknowledging to yourself that now is the time to act - you are already half the way there! Good Luck and please do let us know how it works out! I will have some good thoughts for you xx Roniece  |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Ugh, I have so little free time lately.. I will try and find the time to look through your stuff Lovebug, but dont hate me if I dont  Its good that yer gonna tell him how you feel, just make sure you brace yourself for whatever he may say. I made the mistake of asking a girl out, and wasnt ready for her answer of no, I was utterly destroyed  I do not, however, regret asking her, and you wont either, no matter what the result. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Good luck, Lovebug! I'll look right now, and when I find it I'll bump it up to the top, 'k? Best wishes, Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Why not use this poem? Put an opening verse on it addressed to him and give this to him! |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
this one maybe? today can be that somedaySometimes, I will sit and think About what I wish I could say I would scream it out to you If I only knew the way The way to overcome the fear Of saying it to you I dream of saying it every day But will this ever come true? If this dream ever came to be And I got to say this to you Here is what I would say And every word would be true... “It doesn’t matter what you say As long as I hear your voice And I’ll gladly give my life for yours If I am given the choice It doesn’t matter if you push me away Because I’ll be happy to feel your touch And you can be as mean as you want I won’t leave; I love you too much I wish you would say you loved me Even if it were a lie Because if you reject me now I’ll curl up and die” Yes, I would say this to you If I ever got the chance But, I’m just a coward Stuck in a hopeless romance So, I still sit and think About what I wish I could say Maybe I’ll say it sometime, Maybe... someday |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I found two that you might consider--Deserving of You, and I can't remember the title of the other one, but they are in Teen Poetry #2 at the top. Good luck again! Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 Sprin and love are in the air...best of luck to you, although any guy that can't see that you are a gem is....well he's just plain blind...I'm going poem hunting now |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
lovebug, I finally got teen forum#2 open but cannot access #1. I think either this one or one of the two on page 1 of Teen #2 are perfect. You should really choose. I personally like this one, eliminating two stanzas, the first one and the one beginning, "THis is where you come in". Good luck, lovebug. Liz |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Thank you for the suggestions and support, everyone! I think I'll re-write "Deserving of you" and give it to him, but I'm still open for suggestions! Thanks again!"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I think this one works fine, the main thing is that you let your feelings be known. Good luck. |
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