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Lonely (tanka) |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
lonely road before lonelier road behind me alone with my thoughts great crowds press in upon me no acknowledgment |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I can't believe no one's replied to this...I think it's great  |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Thank you, Ruth. This one must not appeal to very many people. I knew I could count on you! INclan |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
small poem...big meaning and once again I agree with hoot_owl_m there should be more replys...great poem! |
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TravisK New Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 8England |
I can relate to this.Like it. Take Care, Travis Kennedy |
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Joannak Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 121Indiana, USA |
Oh, INclan, you make me feel your loneliness... You must know, you inspire me with your wonderful thoughts and haiku. As for acknowledgement, you only need wait a short while... Thank you, Joanna |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is great INclan! So descriptive! Denise |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
In~ I liked the thought behind this one. Maybe "solitary road behind me" instead of "lonlier"? and "acknowledgement-none" Just a thought, you're the boss! bboog |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Thank you all for your kind responses. Thank you, Cheryl for the compliment. I try. Thank you, Travis. There do seem to be lonely times...even in a crowd. This was written during my 1.5 hour commute home after a LONG week. Joanna, your work inspires me. Thank you for reading me. Thank you, dsnyder. I know you read a lot so your compliment means a lot. Thank you, bboog. I am flattered that you took the time to think and analyze. I take it as a compliment. INclan |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I love this. I love its simplicity and stark imagery. Well done! K |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
You've illustrated, so well, how one can feel their alone~ness even in the largest crowd. Wonderful writing! ~ Claire |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
A long road in few words. very meaningful I like it Liz |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
INclan~ This is just perfect. These Tanka's and Haiku's are so fascinating to read and to do. Thank you for sharing this. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Thank you, Severn, Meadowmuse, Marge, and Liz, you are all most kind. I strive to achieve the standards set by your work. INclan |
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