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Marshmallow Melted Smore
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Marshmallow Melted Smore |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow 
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Marshmallow Melted Smore You stood in front of me looking puzzled like what era of time did I elapse to thee was I being obtrusive ignoring all the time is my mind a marshmallow melted smore? I played with you in your dreams last night dangling just within reach yet so far away did you feel my intense whispering breath smothering your neck with warm dampness? A fingernail touch placed upon exposed knee as my treated lips lightly caressed your nose following it up to your forehead inching desire when all a sudden like a flash you awoke me. I saw a universe of love pouring from your eyes dressing me in slinky lingerie expressing smile before myself knew I was a model in your mind each minute a visual strip tease laced with love Not sure when the train whistle blew telling me every hour spent listening is an hour well worn I walked away knowing now that puzzled look was an open doorway waiting for an ear to fill. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
How sweet--I liked the second-to-last verse. Wonderful work, Lost Dreamer. Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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Witch's Brat Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 100 |
Me too! Just beautiful. WB I am a disturbed person, and I write about disturbed people. ~Tennessee Williams |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
well done ... you played with me in my dreams as I was reading !  Rex}>{{{{o> |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Elizabeth: Thank You very much, I also like that verse best. WB: Thank You, glad you enjoyed. Rex:I hope you had fun Thank you for reading and enjoying |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh...it has been a joy to watch you blossum as a poet my friend |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Ruth, coming from you that compliment sings harmoniously in my mind, Thank you ever so much. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Good pat on the back LD! Wonderful! |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
Isnt it wonderful how we look threw someones eyes that love us..beautiful poem...lovley versus. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful, Gloria! Denise |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I expected a recipe when I saw the title..and I got one..recipe for a lovely poem! Good one, Gloria. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Makes me hungry for smore.....  |
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