Open Poetry #6 |
The Void |
Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Adrift upon night's tideless sea, Seeking out tempetuous ports, Unburied hopes of drifting dead, Punctured by lives of stinging sin, Swells the howling chorus of man's perdition. Mephistopheles doth cloak the night, Darkened depths of melancholy Forever sailing primordial seas To silent tombs of Neptune's grave, As solemn moans of pounding waves Rise forth the sobbing sea. I sail on this great brooding sea, Crossed by no word, no whispered thought, Mocked by crashing waves of despair, As seek solace of nameless port. Do not condemn this helmless ship Adrift in muted windless storm, For in the cold bottomless depths of ocean's currentless void, Lies ghostly ships of past aground Shrouded by the sins of man. As sinking hull fades out of sight Into the murky depths below, Tempest calms as anchor fails, On sinking deck, I mourn my soul, Rise forth the sobbing sea. |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is a beautiful poem! Great use of imagery, I saw everything you expressed. Keep posting!! Love and hugs, Lizzie |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mike, your brooding sea of images is spectacular and dark..."the sobbing sea"...excellent use of words to convey a feeling....more hugs! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
MY! Darkness becomes you my friend. This is excellent.... whew! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
This is beautiful, profound writing, Mike. Seems we are tossing on some of the same waves today... ~ Claire |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent piece, Mike. Wonderful writing. Denise |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Well - What's to say - This is a poignant poem - and quite aptly titled, I might add.. I can't even pick out any lines that I like better than the others - Every one is teeming with fathomed intent... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mike~ Your poetry is just a wonderful treat to venture in. 'Rise forth the sobbing sea.' That line, alone, is worth the read. Thanks for sharing your images of thought. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
your poem is true excellence Mike ... loved every word Rex}>{{{{o> |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Nobody says it like you do Wonderful imagery, Mike I wonder sometimes if I have the same dictionary as you. I think I do, just not the same poetic mind Liz |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Lovely verse Mike...your imagery is grand |
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