»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #6
»
Can You And I?
| Open Poetry #6 |
|
Can You And I? |
|
|
Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow 
|
Can You And I? Can you begin at the base of my mountain slowly climb till reaching the cliff at the utmost top? If I suggested you jump would you, could you, or would you hold onto what you started with till the end? Could you deep sea dive the depths of my ocean concurring the schools of fish currently in control? Would you drown if my oceans depth was to deep or would you rise to the surface for air now and then? Can you diagnose and repair my computer's main frame replacing mother board and ram memory gone bad? Will it require erasing all the memories of the past to reboot and start my repaired main frame all over again? Can a locksmith you become unlocking stubborn doors or are keys a hindrance to you preferring openness? If I locked myself out would you come rescue me or would your priorities leave me finding other measures? Would you allow me to scale your mountain memorizing every ridge bungee jump within your security till daylight turns to night? Could I reach the peak and still see the beautiful valley below through eyes that embrace nature piece by piece? Can I surf the tides of your ocean starting with the highest as it's intense wave caresses my imagination? Could I savor the lowest tide caressing the evening relaxed in the softness of the sandbar below the water's rule? Can I play on the keys of your computer make them come alive with the touch of my fingertips creating romance? Can my computer and your computer network together creating a powerful mega force no one can corrupt? Can I become a master key in your life unlocking all the closed doors so freedom can reign? Can I use my key to unlock our fantasy's making way for two single worlds to become one? Can you and I climb the tallest mountain together hand in hand guiding each other through the journey like there's no tomorrow? Can you and I hang glide over the valley below our sky line floating away further into our destiny forever together? |
||
| © Copyright 2000 RiaL - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nice poem Gloria  |
||
|
Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Ruth: Thank You very much. |
||
|
Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Very good! I love how you tied this together..he..you...the two...good..  |
||
Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LostDreamer~ This is an intricately woven tapestry of feeling. Absolutely stunning. I've read it three times already ... and I just love it. Very, very creative ... and I might venture to say ... a piece from the depth of your soul. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
||
|
Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Wow, Gloria! I am really impressed by this one. You took great thoughts and wove them together expertly to create a piece of writing to be proud of, for sure. Can my computer and your computer network together? Well, I've got the Mac if you've got the Gateway  |
||
|
Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Poet deVine: Thank You very much, it was interesting to write. Marge: Thank You, thank you, thank you, I'm glad you loved it, and yes it came from the deepest of my soul. These would be my thoughts if I were looking today. Balladeer:Thank You deeply, when you tell me one of my poems are good I take it to heart cause of the talented man you are, you brought a smile to my face Sir. I think a Mac would stumble all over a Hewlett, no Gateway yet. |
||
|
tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
L.D A most beautiful piece to read, your imagery and flow was magnificent. Truly most wonderful Tracie |
||
|
Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Tracie: Wow, Thank You very much for your kind words, glad you enjoyed. |
||
|
ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is a great poem! I really enjoyed reading it. Love and hugs, Lizzie  |
||
|
Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Lizzie: Thank You very much, glad you enjoyed |
||
|
doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Gloria, I think this is one of the very best pieces you've written. You've painted a picture with words interweaving your feelings with events and imagery. Nicely done, my friend. -doreen |
||
|
Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
WOW! This is a fantastic piece of writing, Gloria! Absolutely wonderful! Denise |
||
|
Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Doreen: Thank you so much, you know I would not be where I am today writing if it were not for you, and your honesty. Denise:Wow, I sparked a WOW from you I think you may have just ignited my inspiration, Oh no, everyone's gonna run for the hills now...LOL Thank You Denise, I am just crazy right now, I'm in this awesome fabulous mood that I wish would never leave and it's totally natural, I wish I could bottle it for those other times...LOL |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
