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eyesplus2
Member

since 2000-03-02

Posts 163
australia

0 posted 2000-03-30 03:49 AM

              Heart beats
                                                                                    moments in time

                                                                                             tear  drops
                                                                                           Rivers of dreams

                                                                                                     Some found
                                                                                                      Some lost

                 Love given
                                                                                                          Love taken

                                                                                                             Heart beats
                                                                                                               Moments in life

[This message has been edited by eyesplus2 (edited 03-30-2000).]

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

1 posted 2000-03-30 09:12 AM

I like the poem, but found the layout to make it a bit difficult to read...perhaps try something like this:

Heart beats
   moments
     in time
        tear drops
Rivers of dreams
           Some found
              Some lost
           Love given
       Love taken
Heart beats
       moments
           in life

mete out
Member

since 2000-02-16

Posts 270
england

2 posted 2000-03-31 09:22 AM

***eyesplus2,
This is gorgeous.
No offence Hoot, but I like the layout...kinda reminds me of Patrick Jones'
style.
Anyway, yet another fantastic piece, emotive and sooo good!!

I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.

Poet deVine

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

3 posted 2000-03-31 09:26 AM

No offense, but I'm with Hoot...it's a great poem, but the layout was a bit off..

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