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Doomsday #8
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Doomsday #8 |
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Enola Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 138England |
Sometimes it feels like you're the only one. At that moment in time, I can identify with this vision, More than ever. Sometimes I wish that you were here So I could hear those words, Feel the sincerity And cry your tears. Sometimes I would walk a thousand miles Just to feel acception -But not move an inch. I'm waving before blind eyes. My expanding intelligence, Experience and knowledge, They can't explain a thing But you do. You unravel it all. A towering glory: A rotting mass. Does it really matter? I suppose it doesn't. Does it. Sometimes I expect you to walk into my room But that wouldn't be you. Just another cliche, One more unexpected fall. The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Stinging ending that stays with the reader  |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
very emotionally taut, well done. Parker |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
painful...but nicely done..your emotions really come threw. |
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infinat3 sadn3ss Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 85somerset england |
how i wish that you knew that i will always be here for you |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Excellently done. And I like your 'signature phrase' also.  |
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Enola Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 138England |
It's good to know that the emotions come through. Everything I'm writing about at the moment is negative, I'd hate it to seem that I was constantly whining. infinat3 sadn3ss - I already do, stop worrying bud. The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition. |
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mete out Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 270england |
***Enola, You are not whining. All this writing is an on-going process. You are gradually cleansing yourself. Your talent is one very rarely flaunted as well as you have done. *** My expanding intelligence, Experience and knowledge, They can't explain a thing But you do. *** This was my favourite stanza. Although it feels that you can do nothing to help yourself, your day will come. Trust me. Love always, Louise xxx I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it. |
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Enola Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 138England |
mete out - All this writing is an on-going process. You are gradually cleansing yourself. your day will come I suppose this is true, I hope so, I am trying to stay positive about it all. It's become a lot easier now I've started to let it out through poetry. hoot_owl_rn - thank you for your continuing support, I'm really grateful. The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This is interesting that you have labeled this Doomsday...someday you will write a poem called New Beginnings. James |
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Enola Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 138England |
James - you're right, someday I will. The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition. |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Nice poem, It is as usual breath takingly good, I can see that you have put alot of emotion in this one . With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one . |
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