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The Secret Lies of Love (maybe my best one yet!)
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The Secret Lies of Love (maybe my best one yet!) |
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Jone Junior Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 41 |
The rose pedels are red, They lay perfectly across the bed. In hope, and aniticpation, of soon being distrubed. They hope to fly into the air. To fly free, without a care. To be sprung loose and away, Throughout the night and day. They want to feel the love of two, Move around on them like it's new. They want to watch from all around, These new lovers love and hold. But these flowers know not the lie, That the people hold so true. They may soar, they may fly high, But if they knew the truth, they would turn blue. For what the flowers are blind to see, Are that these new lovers, are old lovers indeed. They before have never loved, For there is another at home, Who is waiting to love them more. What the pedels see is passion, Romance, Power, Attraction. --------------- The rose pedels are red, They lay perfectly across the bed. In hope, and aniticpation, of soon being distrubed. But these pedels, they do not move. For the person who spread them is not around. They are sitting in front of the tube. For the one that they need to hold, Is busy, distrubing someone else's rose pedels. [This message has been edited by Jone (edited 03-28-2000).] |
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Jone Junior Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 41 |
This isn't based in any part on real life just a little thought that came to mind peace out |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is a pretty good attempt here...some of the words are misspelled, so you may want to work on that. If I can be of any help please call on me! Keep writing!  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Try writing your poems in a word processor and running them through a spell check before posting...I am notirious for spelling mistakes so do all of mine that way. I'd like to find a chat program that has spell check  Little things like that can distract from a good poem. Looking forward to reading some others |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very sad poem. I'm sure it happens more often than I'd like to think. Denise |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
This is really quite good Rex}>{{{{o> |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Nice poem....sad that things like that happen everyday to innocent people though. --------------------------------------------- Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Jone Junior Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 41 |
i know that the spelling mistakes are there.... i choose to express myself through them.. as we are all imperfect... i close my eyes and write... if i miss a key, i cannot correct it.... because it would no longer have be written in the moment |
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