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Martie
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0 posted 2000-03-28 07:44 PM



Maybe once
we could fold into each other
and find another place
beyond what we are,
where there would be no measure
only melting.

I am one thought in time.
The sea does not feel
my toes dangling,
the sun moves always
into another daybreak,
the turning world
holds me to her
for reasons of her own.

That precious footprint
cannot sustain itself,
consumed by minutes
it is gone.

Maybe once
we could find another way
of knowing,
glimpse beyond
one separate thought
to that other place
where there would be not measure
only melting.



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Parker
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1 posted 2000-03-28 07:50 PM


Ok, Martie this one is melting me now.

....we could fold into each other

that line is just so sweet, this one is brilliant.

Parker

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2 posted 2000-03-28 07:59 PM


Well i am glad you re-posted it..this is my first day in here..very beautiful..lovely.

 

Martie
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3 posted 2000-03-28 08:30 PM


Parker--so sweet, thank you, melting is sort of romantic, huh

Cheryl--sure glad you read it...thanks and welcome to Passions

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4 posted 2000-03-28 09:09 PM


This is beautiful, Martie!! Just beautiful!!

Denise

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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5 posted 2000-03-29 03:43 AM


I love this!  Exquisite feelings. I love the line about "folding into each other", and also especially enoy the lines - "That precious footprint cannot sustain itself, consumed by minutes it is gone".  Oh, man, what those words speak to me!
My net's been out for most of three weeks now.  Now I'm hunting up what I've been missing, before it goes out again.  I might have thirty seconds!!!


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6 posted 2000-03-29 03:48 AM


This is great, Martie... Maybe once, maybe twice... Heaven knows it sure sounds nice! *S*
Martie
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7 posted 2000-03-29 09:10 AM


Denise--Reposted it because it is one of my favorites from the past

Rosemary--thank you for your always wonderful comments

suthern--yes, once twice or more.

Tess
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8 posted 2000-03-29 09:21 AM


I like the image of the footprint disappearing..and how that relates to the love mentioned in the poem

 "Love is the only drug you can take that will convince you each time
that you've never had it before."
~author unknown~



Rex Allen McCoy
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9 posted 2000-03-29 09:32 AM


beautiful thoughts Marty ... no measure ... just melting our mixed emotions

Rex}>{{{{o>

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10 posted 2000-03-29 10:17 AM


Hi Martie,

Such lovely words from a wonderful lady, beautifully writen.

Cerenity

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11 posted 2000-03-29 10:36 AM


Oh I do love the line and the thought of "folding into each other" Well written and beautiful  
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