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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
‘I don’t know what to think,’ she said ‘I feel too much to feel,’ she said And if you want to know the truth again Just have to wrap your arms around the wind ‘And trust in something higher than us,’ I said ‘There’s something missing inside of me,’ she said ‘There’s too much noise to hear me,’ she said Clearness is offered, but will never be found We are one with the sky, the water, the ground ‘How much do you need to be touched?’ I said ‘Can’t pretend this ghost again,’ she said ‘Can’t let in, or even begin,’ she said With her arms folded, eyes downcast The sun was drowning in the past ‘Things gold cannot buy your soul,’ I said ‘Just another day, a minute, an hour,’ she said ‘Just hold me again like a little flower,’ she said And once more with arms around each other Trying, and praying not to smother ‘Just me and you this complete,’ I said [This message has been edited by JML (edited 03-29-2000).] |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I like it! Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
This piece speaks to me of a tenderness, a willingness to reach out and touch, perhaps protect, the soul of another...and I love the natural, elemental flavor of some of your lines ~ "Just have to wrap your arms around the wind" "We are one with the sky, the water, the ground" "The sun was drowning in the past" ~ Claire |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I don’t know what to think,’ she said I feel too much to feel,’ she said ********************** And trust in something higher than us,’ I said ************************ There’s something missing inside of me,’ she said There’s too much noise to hear me,’ she said *********************** How much do you need to be touched?’ I said *********************** Can’t pretend this ghost again,’ she said Can’t let in, or even begin,’ she said *********************** Just another day, a minute, an hour,’ she said *********************** Trying, and praying not to smother** Just me and you this complete,’ I said *********************** your right jer, this does read kinda like a song... small world...I know this woman, very well. you asked me about the title? call it "Holding Her Heart In His Hand" (or not.) your jm < !signature--> Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules Do you care what is thought by others about you If this day is all that is promised to you Do you live for the present, the future the past... tracy chapman [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 03-28-2000).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Touching the corners of my heart with this one. I've been on both sides of that embrace...as most have. Well written with a gift that you put to use so well. |
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gemini shadow Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 70the mystic |
hey, this is really cool. It does sound like the makings of a song.She is a lucky girl, having this wrote for her. You show a tender gentle heart in this.I agree with the chick above, Heart in Hand would be a cool title. a poem or song like this would steal my heart. gemini I want to be the face you see when you close your eyes I want to be the touch you need every single night I want to be your fantasy And be your reality And everything between I want you to need me, like I need you. celine dion |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh...once more romance drips from your pen  |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thank you all so much. I am grateful I touched a nerve out there...*S* |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautiful writing! Very nice! Denise |
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