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Of wait and fate
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Of wait and fate |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Of wait and fate I bathed in passions waters, Emersed in its confine. Left my senses out to dry, Like dew upon a vine. Walked upon its blissful beach And played upon its shore. Never thought about a change, Or what God had in store. Time has brought about a storm, That struck me to the bone. Plummeting down from heaven And now I am alone. Distance blacks a barrier, The touching and the sight. It stole away the senses of, My passion and delight. And now I hold in distant wait, The future of my distant fate. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent expression, Seymour! Denise |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Superb!! You have a way with words and a way with opening the heart to your message. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy, you speak from your heart and I hear you. Excellent poem! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, We have all been through this one. A painful experience, but you express it so beautifully Love ya Liz |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Sy, Well spoken. I love this poem, because it rings true within me as well.  Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Walked upon its blissful beach And played upon its shore. Never thought about a change, Or what God had in store. Time has brought about a storm, That struck me to the bone. Plummeting down from heaven And now I am alone. -------------------------- Sy, this is excellent...truly, perfect rhyme and flow and so full of emotional imagery... very well written and expressed...your emotions drip off the page. take care, jm Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules Do you care what is thought by others about you If this day is all that is promised to you Do you live for the present, the future the past... tracy chapman |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Denise, Thank you for the excellent. *L* Butterfly, Thank you for the superb. A beautiful comment. Martie, And you are in my heart. *L* Elizabeth, Thank you and love ya Sy Terry, Glad it rang a bell for you, thank you Janet, Thank you for the sweet comment, *L* |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I find many meanings in this poem and tonight it suits me well. Good writing, Sy.  |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
Really lovely poem...you write beautifully...I enjoy reading all your poems. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Time's storms may blacken brightest night with no sign of reprieve. Indeed I've faced that raging fright but somehow lived to breathe. The storm will pass for you, my friend. I believe that earnest fact. Clutch near your dear ones and your faith and whole, you'll stand, intact. Your poem, as always, is wonderful, Seymour. |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
Great poem Symor, You truly are a gifted talent. Keep up the great work. I totally feel this poem. It reminds me of my life. Before I joined the Corp I was involved heavily in youth ministry and wanting to go on the mission field but God took me somewhere else for a season. I am headed to the mission field but that is still a little off. Now there have been many storms that life and time have brought upon me since my enlistment, and I have felt very alone like I had lost God. Also, the distance, being away from all my family and friends and everything that I had known my whole lift seemed to douse my passion burning deep inside me. Like the poem states I wait for my future fate. I just relate. I do not hate and I'm no reprobate. I will get a clean slate and hopefully a full plate. Nothing is ever late. Jfreak |
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