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Apology of Sorts |
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Destiny Junior Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 47 |
i know i brought you to this place, led you to this fire... i opened up the doors of hell, tempted you with desire. i wanted more than i could give and more than i could see, and somewhere in your trusting heart you put your faith in me. and there i see that my own choice, my hope and selfishness, has brought you to this sacrifice and given you distress. it must be hard to see the ash and not call out to blame and if it were my life in smoke i know i'd feel the same. but somehow even here and now, with all the strife and pain, i plead with you to walk the coals and look at this as gain... and should this prove too much for you and leave you feeling numb, i can't regret the way i've loved and sorry just won't come. [This message has been edited by Destiny (edited 03-30-2000).] |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
and should this prove to much for you and leave you feeling numb, i can't regret the way i've loved and sorry just won't come. ------------------------------------- I really like your perspective in this poem. It has alot to say about the other side when a couple breaks up. Welcome to passions. Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is a beautiful poem, Destiny! Denise |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
'I can't regret the way I've loved and sorry just won't come.' I like this verse. Destiny - Nice finale...  |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Nice expression. I liked the final two lines as well. Good writing. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Destiny. . . I see that you don't apologize for the feelings that you feel. . . this is an excellent poem. . . Excellent words. . . -------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Exceptional writing...very well put. Welcome to Passions  ~ Claire |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Man that next to the last stanza hurts...literally. Great poem... great title. Even if I can feel the blisters on my feet... Michael |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lovely Destiny..I accept your apology no matter how brief and humble. James |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Destiny...lovely written verse |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Very well done, indeed, and perfect rhyme and meter. And the content, superb! Liz |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Destiny~ WOW ! This is quite the awesome piece. WOW ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
DESTINY THIS WAS A GREAT POEM. I REALLY LIKE THE LAST LINE IT FITS ME PERFECT "i can't regret the way i've loved and sorry just won't come." GOOD JOB ~ANGIE |
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ZuMBLe Junior Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 33 |
First off, I have to thank you. I thank you for opening my eyes. I've been upset with myself for loving someone, for caring about them. But now I realize that I shouldn't be sorry.. and I'm not. Very well written poem. Everyone should read this poem. Nobody should be sorry for loving someone. Zum |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
I loved it from the first word to the last. |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
What a beautiful poem, Destiny! I am impressed by your sensitivity and power of expression. Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Beautiful.... I have often wondered if it is better to love and not be loved in return or to be loved and not love back.....You have a very strong message here. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Destiny, Wonderful words!!! This is a great piece. You should never be sorry for how you feel. Well done!! ------------------------------------------------ Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Destiny Junior Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 47 |
thank you all for loving this poem for me... i hated it when i finished it! it was difficult for me to let this one loose for other people to read... thanks for being supportive Destiny |
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Sandra Cox Junior Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 48Essex, London,UK |
I can see my ex writing something like this to me. I guess its strange to see the other side of things. Sandra |
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Passions Voice Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 291Michigan |
I'm not going to say that you shouldn't apologize for the way that you felt then. But, what happened if this didn't work out? Or, this could be just a poem. But see? You've made me think. Just milling around back here, and I found this. Hope that there's more. passion is life. . . ~Diana |
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